The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

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The table below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in Australia in 1999.

The table gives information about financial status of the Australian households in 1999, with a further classification by established family type.

According to the data given by the table, it can be clearly seen that the majority of the population are not threatened by poverty. In addition, the order of the family types after proportion is different from the ones after numbers.

Having an analysis by the level of percentage and figures, 11% of Australian families (about 1837000) live in poverty. The highest low-income proportion (21%) is recorded by sole parents, whereas, they do not represent the highest number of household, reached by couples with children (99300). The single, no children family has remained on the second highest place, only 19% and 359000 individuals. Evidently, the aged and without children couple and single people are not seriously affected by poverty. The aged couple recorded the lowest proportion (4%) and number (4800). The figure of sole parents is similar to the couples without children about 250000 households.

In conclusion, aged families are not likely to have a critical financial status, more than other categories.

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with a further classification by established family type.
with a further classification by the established family type.

the order of the family types after proportion is different from the ones after numbers.
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Sentence: The single, no children family has remained on the second highest place, only 19 and 359000 individuals.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and family

Sentence: Evidently, the aged and without children couple and single people are not seriously affected by poverty.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to children and couple

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what do you mean 'aged families' ?

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