You borrowed some books from your school or college library. Unfortunately you have to go away to visit a sick relative and cannot return the books in time.
Write a letter to the library. Explain what has happened and tell them what you want to do about it.
Dear Mrs. Potter,
I’ve borrowed two books from your library (Communist manifesto and My Struggle) two weeks earlier since I have a great interest with World War 1 and World War 2 incidents.
However, I should have returned it by today; Regretfully, my uncle had a heart attack yesterday since he has been suffering from several diseases from the last year and he really needs my assistance for a while, not to mention that he has serious seizures and he cannot be alone.
Furthermore, there is a chance that I can leave the hospital at 10th July; Where I might have the time to return the books. I would also like to know if I am going to pay a fine for this delay or not. Whether I am forced to pay the fine, then you can contact me via my e-mail or my mobile number.
I am looking forward for your reply and I want to thank you in advance for appreciating my situation.
Best regards,
Omar Sheta
Comments
Thanks for evaluating my
Thanks for evaluating my letter.
But, What was my flaw that prevented me to achieve score 7?
When we didn't put any flaws,
When we didn't put any flaws, but the mark are not 8.0 or over, it means you need to improve the language.
There are some sentences which could be developed better. for example:
I have a great interest with World War 1 and World War 2 incidents.
better: I have a great interest with incidents in the World War 1 and World War 2.
There are duplicate words like 'since':
since I have a great interest
since he has been suffering
There are a lot of sentences starting with the subject 'I'.
You may borrow books from library or search online and learn academic essay writing.
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 7 10
No. of Words: 170 200
No. of Characters: 709 1000
No. of Different Words: 113 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.611 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.171 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.339 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 40 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 29 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 17 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 10 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.286 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 13.317 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.571 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.448 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.853 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.228 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4