The bar chart below show the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia

Essay topics:

The bar chart below show the participation of children in selected leisure activities in Australia

This bar chart shows the participation of 5 to 14 years old boys and girls in 5 leisure activities (Stake Boarding, Bike riding, Watching TV, Computer games and Art and Craft) in percentage.

Overall, both boys and girls shows a great interest in watching TV/Videos which is about 90%,whereas boys shows least interest in Art and Craft which is about 30% and girls shows least interest in Skate boarding which is about 25%

Both boys and girls have shown some great interest in watching TV/Videos which is about 90%. They also having great interest in electronic games which is about 80% for boys and 60% for girls. Both of them have interest in bike riding as well which is about 70% for boys and 60% for girls.

On the other side both boys and girls have least interest in Skate riding activity which is about 30% for boys and 25% for girls.Girls shows some more interest than boys in Art and Craft which is about 40% and 25% respectively.

Votes
Average: 4.4 (12 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 107, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'shows the least'.
Suggestion: shows the least
.../Videos which is about 90%,whereas boys shows least interest in Art and Craft which is abou...
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Line 3, column 174, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'shows the least'.
Suggestion: shows the least
... and Craft which is about 30% and girls shows least interest in Skate boarding which is abo...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 39, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[3]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'have the least'.
Suggestion: have the least
... On the other side both boys and girls have least interest in Skate riding activity which...
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Line 7, column 130, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Girls
...is about 30% for boys and 25% for girls.Girls shows some more interest than boys in A...
^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'so', 'well', 'whereas']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.375 0.268076937826 140% => OK
Verbs: 0.114583333333 0.116061578633 99% => OK
Adjectives: 0.046875 0.0759168565197 62% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0104166666667 0.0366838410393 28% => Some adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0104166666667 0.0131127313244 79% => OK
Prepositions: 0.151041666667 0.155750635184 97% => OK
Participles: 0.0260416666667 0.0379272487307 69% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.29214914238 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00520833333333 0.0210936926555 25% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.00175180941692 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.046875 0.0948980150116 49% => Some determiners wanted.
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0416666666667 0.00967000014798 431% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 947.0 1161.00487805 82% => OK
No of words: 169.0 196.9 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.60355029586 5.90752243213 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.60555127546 3.73763899035 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.189349112426 0.337110787985 56% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.159763313609 0.247514529752 65% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.147928994083 0.171178102325 86% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0591715976331 0.112407865282 53% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.29214914238 2.65546596893 86% => OK
Unique words: 70.0 106.607317073 66% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.414201183432 0.546246751206 76% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 32.3539666776 49.3433353143 66% => OK
How many sentences: 5.0 8.93414634146 56% => OK
Sentence length: 33.8 23.0094962315 147% => OK
Sentence length SD: 86.3564705161 42.9750493124 201% => OK
Chars per sentence: 189.4 135.714022679 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.8 23.0094962315 147% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.8 0.689975730869 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.48048780488 270% => OK
Readability: 49.7763313609 47.7609492067 104% => OK
Elegance: 4.07692307692 2.94281807926 139% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.153371386784 0.418131533498 37% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.380389011981 0.181151798455 210% => Sentence is so close to another sentence.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0545791517655 0.0850326197045 64% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.883306906842 0.706616315825 125% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.121558757303 0.157042692854 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121210462443 0.228904883108 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0908601264721 0.108899403657 83% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.491753284923 0.367819155151 134% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.132486311838 0.0812612215331 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.137551649769 0.316326947829 43% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0947631194954 0.0921553760075 103% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70731707317 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.14146341463 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.08536585366 24% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.16585365854 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 1.0 0.956097560976 105% => OK
Neutral topic words: 1.0 3.02926829268 33% => OK
Total topic words: 5.0 7.1512195122 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.

both boys and girls shows a great interest
both boys and girls show a great interest

whereas boys shows least interest
whereas boys show the least interest

and girls shows least interest in
and girls show the least interest in

They also having great interest in electronic games
They also have great interest in electronic games

Girls shows some more interest
Girls show some more interest

flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2

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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 6 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 10
No. of Words: 173 200
No. of Characters: 743 1000
No. of Different Words: 71 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.627 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.295 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.131 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 29 60
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 23 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 20 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 5 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 28.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 11.006 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.712 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.907 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.533 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 4