The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The given bar chart compares the proportion of Australian men and women in six age groups who was (were) active physically in (on) a regular basis in 2010.

Overall, women did more regular physical activity than men in five of six age groups over the given period. The most physically active age group in men was 15 to 24, compared to 45 to 54 in women. Furthermore, the most significant difference between two genders was on 45 to 54 age group.

In the youngest age category 15 to 24, the proportion of physically active men was slightly higher than their counterpart (52.8% and 47.7% respectively). However, men were less active than women in the remaining age groups. 48.9% of women aged 25 to 34 were active physically as opposed to men at 42.2% in the same group. Similarly, between the ages of 35 and 64, over half of the Australian women did some form of physical activity on a regular basis, while the proportion of active men remained around 10% lower, at 42.2%. Finally, almost equivalent data at 47% was recorded in both genders who aged 65 and over.

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Average: 7.2 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 99, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'been'.
Suggestion: been
...men and women in six age groups who was were active physically in on a regular basis...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, furthermore, however, if, similarly, so, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 1.0 5.60731707317 18% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 3.97073170732 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 873.0 965.302439024 90% => OK
No of words: 189.0 196.424390244 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61904761905 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.70779275107 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59235502637 2.65546596893 98% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502645502646 0.547539520022 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 271.8 283.868780488 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 22.4926829268 93% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3249149464 43.030603864 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.0 112.824112599 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 22.9334400587 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.11111111111 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.478199584478 0.215688989381 222% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.233014267527 0.103423049105 225% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122974538674 0.0843802449381 146% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.390999379982 0.15604864568 251% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0806927220111 0.0819641961636 98% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 13.2329268293 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 61.2550243902 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.3012195122 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 11.4140731707 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.6 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.9970731707 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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