The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

Essay topics:

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart given illustrates the proportion of Australian in both genders from different age groups who did exercise at high frequency in 2010.
Overall, Australian women seemed to be more hard-working than men in working out among all the age groups.
It was observed that only 15-24 age group was different from others group which had the percentage of women doing exercise regularly much more than the percentage of men did, its reached a peak at 52,8% compared to 47,7% of women' figure. After that, we saw an upward tendency in Australian female and the highest peak was belongs to those who from 45-54 age group, was 53,3% (rose from 47,7% to 53,3%). By contrast, the percentage of Australian male decreased slowly from 52,8% to 42,2%, and 39,5% respectively (wen down by 13,3%).
However, there was a change in both gender begin with the 45-54 age group. While there was seen a declined trend of women who were older 54 years old ( the percentage dropped slightly from 53,3% to 47,1%), the percentage of men who did regular physical activity increased by 7,2% to 46,7%

Votes
Average: 7.8 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...end of women who were older 54 years old the percentage dropped slightly from 53,...
^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 7.0 114% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 6.8 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.97073170732 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 185.0 196.424390244 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.82702702703 4.92477711251 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68801715136 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47196700851 2.65546596893 93% => OK
Unique words: 112.0 106.607317073 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605405405405 0.547539520022 111% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 8.94146341463 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.0733031778 43.030603864 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.571428571 112.824112599 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.4285714286 22.9334400587 115% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.57142857143 5.23603664747 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286568145543 0.215688989381 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137019879567 0.103423049105 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.076198444097 0.0843802449381 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184865352768 0.15604864568 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0550254848581 0.0819641961636 67% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 13.2329268293 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 61.2550243902 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.3012195122 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.03 11.4140731707 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 40.7170731707 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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