Canadian communities
The bar chart compares and contrast data on the difference in the number of population of 12 distinct aboriginal communities lived in the urban and metropolitan area in Canada in 1996. A closer look at the diagram highlights the fact that in 1996 census, Winnipeg had the largest population, whereas Victoria was the smallest.
More specifically, there were almost exactly 46,000 population of Winnipeg community, as the largest one, which is almost 8 times bigger than the smallest group of aboriginal community, Victoria, with only slightly over 6,000 residents. The second and third largest communities found were Edmonton, with an average of 33,000 citizen, and Vancouver which had just a little over 30,000 populations with a difference of 3,000 people.
Another fact worth noticing is that Saskatoon and Toronto had the same number of citizen with 16,000 populations on each community, and Montreal and Prince Albert also had common in population with exact 10,000 residents.
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