The chart below gives information about global sales of games software CDs and DVD or video

Essay topics:

The chart below gives information about global sales of games software, CDs and DVD or video.

The bar chart illustrates the global sales of games software, CDs and DVD/video during 4 - year period, from 2000 to 2003.
Overall, it is clear that the sale of DVD/video increased significantly and CDs sale was the item having the highest figure of sale during this period.
In 2000, CDs sale was the highest figure, at 35 billion dollar. DVD/video sale was 18 billion, a little bit higher than games software sale which was only 15 billion. After 2 years, in 2002, the sale of both games software and DVD/video increased. There was a notiable increase of DVD/video sale, from 18 billion in 2000 to 25 billion in 2002. Whereas, the sale of games software rose up slightly, from 15 billion to 18 billion.
In contrast, the sale of CDs tended to decline during this period. From 35 billion in 2000, this figure fell to only 31 billion in 2003 but still the highest sale among three items. In the same year, DVD/video sale reached a peak of 31 billion while this figure for games software was 29 billion.

Votes
Average: 6.3 (19 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 96, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
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Line 3, column 97, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, still, whereas, while, in contrast

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 3.97073170732 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 827.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62011173184 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.36211743261 2.65546596893 89% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.497206703911 0.547539520022 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 229.5 283.868780488 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 3.36585365854 297% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.9337617788 43.030603864 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.7 112.824112599 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.7 5.23603664747 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.09268292683 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.300930531768 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.165311766236 0.103423049105 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0998406823403 0.0843802449381 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.247880379396 0.15604864568 159% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0993782067543 0.0819641961636 121% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 13.2329268293 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 79.6 61.2550243902 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 10.3012195122 62% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 11.4140731707 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.3 8.06136585366 91% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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