The chart below shows different levels of post-school qualification in Australia and the proportions of men and women who held them in 1999.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart below shows different levels of post-school qualification in Australia and the proportions of men and women who held them in 1999.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by Jamalin on Mon, 10/10/2016 - 01:26

The chart illustrates five grades of after-school qualifications in Australia and the share of different sexes, men and women, who graduated in 1999. The two comparisons between genders are scaled from 0% to 100%.
In general, the males dominated in every section of degree, but only two qualifications the females against males. the women, seemingly, overpowered in the section of undergraduate diploma and Bachelor's degree. The females stood at over 50% but males only stayed at below 50%.
Despite that, by 1999, the men dominated in the three of different backgrounds. The males who had skilled vocational diploma background populated at 90% populations, postgraduate diploma qualification reached out at 70% graduations, and master's degree settled at 60% populations.
Above all, the big contrast of proportion was had on the skilled vocational degree. The women only stayed at 10%, but the Men reached out 90%. Meanwhile, the others gap of comparisons did not differ far from 80%.

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Average: 7.8 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 115, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
...alifications the females against males. the women, seemingly, overpowered in the se...
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Line 4, column 158, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'others'' or 'other's'?
Suggestion: others'; other's
...the Men reached out 90%. Meanwhile, the others gap of comparisons did not differ far f...
^^^^^^

Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'if', 'so', 'while', 'in general']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.269841269841 0.268076937826 101% => OK
Verbs: 0.121693121693 0.116061578633 105% => OK
Adjectives: 0.047619047619 0.0759168565197 63% => OK
Adverbs: 0.042328042328 0.0366838410393 115% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0 0.0131127313244 0% => Some pronouns wanted.
Prepositions: 0.153439153439 0.155750635184 99% => OK
Participles: 0.037037037037 0.0379272487307 98% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.10007316832 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Infinitives: 0.00529100529101 0.0210936926555 25% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.00529100529101 0.00175180941692 302% => OK
Determiners: 0.100529100529 0.0948980150116 106% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0 0.00437022459523 0% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.010582010582 0.00967000014798 109% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 988.0 1161.00487805 85% => OK
No of words: 156.0 196.9 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.33333333333 5.90752243213 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53411884305 3.73763899035 95% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.391025641026 0.337110787985 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.320512820513 0.247514529752 129% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.192307692308 0.171178102325 112% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.179487179487 0.112407865282 160% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10007316832 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 95.0 106.607317073 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.608974358974 0.546246751206 111% => OK
Word variations: 53.9010715331 49.3433353143 109% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 8.93414634146 112% => OK
Sentence length: 15.6 23.0094962315 68% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7719534275 42.9750493124 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8 135.714022679 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6 23.0094962315 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.5 0.689975730869 72% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.84146341463 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.48048780488 135% => OK
Readability: 47.6512820513 47.7609492067 100% => OK
Elegance: 2.8064516129 2.94281807926 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.492463352371 0.418131533498 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.081108102646 0.181151798455 45% => Sentence sentence coherence is low.
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0835875526739 0.0850326197045 98% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.620277645535 0.706616315825 88% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.125327984496 0.157042692854 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.233369938906 0.228904883108 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.140159165703 0.108899403657 129% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.329514457767 0.367819155151 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0154367980363 0.0812612215331 19% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.348184131486 0.316326947829 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.096091042384 0.0921553760075 104% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70731707317 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.14146341463 0% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.08536585366 171% => OK
Positive topic words: 3.0 3.16585365854 95% => OK
Negative topic words: 0.0 0.956097560976 0% => OK
Neutral topic words: 5.0 3.02926829268 165% => OK
Total topic words: 8.0 7.1512195122 112% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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