The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

Essay topics:

The charts below show the results of a survey about what people of different age groups say makes them most happy.

The pie charts compare the percentage of some different factors that make both of age group under and over 30 years old feel joyful.
It is clear that the achievement at work and doing hobbies are the highest factors for the happiness of people of different age groups. Additionally, there are some various factors that make each age group happy.
For people aged under 30 years old, the proportion of the achievement at work is highest, at 32%, whereas the figure for the younger age group is slightly lower, at 31%. Meanwhile, the second highest factor for both age groups is doing hobbies, at 22% for the younger people and 24% for the older people.
On the other hand, having a good appearance that makes up 18% effect on the happiness of people aged under 30 years old, while 20% of older people who choose financial security is an important factor to their joyfulness. The percentage of traveling that has 15% impact of happiness factor on younger age group and 14% of older people feel happy when they are with their family. The figure for other factors affects the enjoyment of people for over and under 30 years old is lowest, at only 10% and 14% respectively.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, whereas, while, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.0 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 3.15609756098 222% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 33.7804878049 86% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 966.0 965.302439024 100% => OK
No of words: 207.0 196.424390244 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66666666667 4.92477711251 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.79308509922 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38131422221 2.65546596893 90% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478260869565 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 286.2 283.868780488 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.45097560976 96% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.4926829268 111% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.9751152072 43.030603864 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.75 112.824112599 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.875 22.9334400587 113% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.125 5.23603664747 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.09268292683 24% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185798731811 0.215688989381 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110977308111 0.103423049105 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0514076648545 0.0843802449381 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148227337667 0.15604864568 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0439147222288 0.0819641961636 54% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 13.2329268293 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 61.2550243902 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.39 8.06136585366 92% => OK
difficult_words: 33.0 40.7170731707 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.9970731707 109% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.0658536585 99% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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