The diagram below shows stages and equipment used in cement-making process and how cement is used to produce for concrete production.

The diagrams illustrate the procedures of cement manufacture and concrete production.

Overall, the manufacture of cement necessitates various equipments and multiple procedures. However, the production of concrete is simple when compared to cement production.

Cement production involves 5 procedures and 4 machines. First, the raw materials of limestone and clay are crushed into powder in crusher. Then the concotion of limestone powder and clay powder mix in a mixer befor rotating and heating in a cylinder. Afterward, the semi-product is grinded to the final product of cement that ready to pack in bags.

The produciton of concrete merely involve a mixer, however, the proportion of raw materials is contant. The raw materials include cement(15%), sand(25%), water(10%) and gravel(50%). After dumping all the perscise percentage os materials into a blender, the mixer will start to spine. The fully mixed mixture is concrete that used for building purpose.

Votes
Average: 7 (2 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 7, column 141, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...nt. The raw materials include cement 15% , sand 25% , water 10% and gravel 50% . ...
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Line 7, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
... materials include cement 15% , sand 25% , water 10% and gravel 50% . After dumpi...
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Line 7, column 164, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nclude cement 15% , sand 25% , water 10% and gravel 50% . After dumping all the p...
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Line 7, column 180, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...% , sand 25% , water 10% and gravel 50% . After dumping all the perscise percenta...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 2.0 5.60731707317 36% => OK
Preposition: 19.0 33.7804878049 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 818.0 965.302439024 85% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.41721854305 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9116697753 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 89.0 106.607317073 83% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.58940397351 0.547539520022 108% => OK
syllable_count: 252.9 283.868780488 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 10.0 4.33902439024 230% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 22.4926829268 58% => Sentence length is too short
Sentence length SD: 15.7495900511 43.030603864 37% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 74.3636363636 112.824112599 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.7272727273 22.9334400587 60% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 1.81818181818 5.23603664747 35% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 1.69756097561 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 1.13902439024 263% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.09268292683 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.239953062382 0.215688989381 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0992987662554 0.103423049105 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0881998264977 0.0843802449381 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175158408304 0.15604864568 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0827793874458 0.0819641961636 101% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 13.2329268293 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 49.82 61.2550243902 81% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.56 11.4140731707 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.51 8.06136585366 118% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 11.4329268293 52% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.9970731707 65% => Gunning_fog is low.
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 71.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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