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There is an issue about why many people take unhealthy way of life. In this essay, I will discuss reasons for it and suggest possible solutions.
Let us start with the reasons why some people assume an unhealthy way of life. The first motive is that people are usually subjected to stress in many places. They develop unhealthy habits, such as smoking and drinking, because they often feel stressed by modern hectic lifestyle. Another motive is that they cannot buy healthy food. Many people eat a great deal of unhealthy meals, including fast food and junk food, since they basically cannot afford organic food, which contain vital nutritious and do not lead to obesity. Furthermore, people often have many unwanted friends. Many young people, for instance, develop a heavy addiction to drugs by making friends with criminals, so they put their health at risk in early ages.
However, some social workers suggest the following actions to tackle these reasons. Firstly, people should do exercise. Stressed people should do the workout to relax from a stressful day at work instead, if they want to have a more sensible life. Secondly, they should buy crops from gardeners. People, who cannot afford costly groceries, should address to people owning farms, so that they can purchase the same crops, but at much lower prices than in the overpriced market. Moreover, youngsters should stop seeing unwelcome acquaintances. To protect their children from the usage of drugs, their parents should explain them what are the consequences of this detrimental addiction as well as convince them to leave these unwanted fellows.
In conclusion, even though there is a set of reasons for developing unhealthy style of life, I think that it is possible to deal with them by assuming the above mentioned measures.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, well, for instance, i think, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 7.0 100% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 1.00243902439 1097% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 5.0 6.8 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 5.60731707317 482% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 33.7804878049 110% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1513.0 965.302439024 157% => OK
No of words: 296.0 196.424390244 151% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.11148648649 4.92477711251 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14784890444 3.73543355544 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4847576797 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 106.607317073 168% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60472972973 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 450.0 283.868780488 159% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 1.07073170732 467% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 3.36585365854 119% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 8.94146341463 190% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.0160811631 43.030603864 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 89.0 112.824112599 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4117647059 22.9334400587 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 5.23603664747 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 1.69756097561 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 3.70975609756 108% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 1.13902439024 878% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.00478648762388 0.215688989381 2% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00141803058415 0.103423049105 1% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0056721223366 0.0843802449381 7% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00213411021236 0.15604864568 1% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00369638731676 0.0819641961636 5% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 13.2329268293 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 11.4140731707 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 40.7170731707 189% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.4329268293 57% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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