The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in the three different countries.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in the three different countries.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph illustrates the accumulation of the population aged 65 and over. The study of those starts at 1940 until the prediction of the next 40 years ahead. The figures are calculated in the range of 0-30 %.
Overall, the population of elderly people in the three countries will rise significantly in the future years, even tough, at the previous years, the populations of old Americans and Japanese fluctuated in the number of accumulations.
the elderly Sweden always increased slightly 5% in every decade. Consequently, at 2040, the number will stop at 25%.
The number old Americans and Japanese went up and down. The number of aged people in the USA increased 5% in two decades between 1960 and 1980, but at 40 years after, the numbers decreased slightly 2%. The fluctuation occurred too with elderly people in Japan. The number decreased presumably 4% in four decades, 1940-1980, and went up again to 5% at 2000. however, besides those fluctuations, the proportions of elderly of those couple counties will lead up drastically to over 20 % and 25% respectively.

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Average: 7 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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... prediction of the next 40 years ahead. The figures are calculated in the range of ...
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...uated in the number of accumulations. the elderly Sweden always increased slightl...
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...ter, the numbers decreased slightly 2%. The fluctuation occurred too with elderly p...
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...urred too with elderly people in Japan. The number decreased presumably 4% in four ...
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Suggestion: However
... 1980, and went up again to 5% at 2000. however, besides those fluctuations, the propor...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, consequently, however, if

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 1.0 7.0 14% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 8.0 6.8 118% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.15609756098 0% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.97073170732 126% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 893.0 965.302439024 93% => OK
No of words: 179.0 196.424390244 91% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98882681564 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.65774358864 3.73543355544 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91859162968 2.65546596893 110% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 106.607317073 93% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.553072625698 0.547539520022 101% => OK
syllable_count: 263.7 283.868780488 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 1.53170731707 0% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 13.0 4.33902439024 300% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 3.36585365854 89% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.6433969153 43.030603864 127% => OK
Chars per sentence: 81.1818181818 112.824112599 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2727272727 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.54545454545 5.23603664747 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 3.70975609756 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.112112019752 0.215688989381 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469552367044 0.103423049105 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0697937518966 0.0843802449381 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0747626628235 0.15604864568 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0467676597863 0.0819641961636 57% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.2329268293 77% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 61.2550243902 104% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.3012195122 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 11.4140731707 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.05 8.06136585366 100% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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