The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Essay topics:

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the amount of people aged 65 and more during the time of 1940 and 2040 in three countries: Japan, Sweden and USA. We can see that the number of old persons in these three countries grow through years and will reach over 20% of population in each country in 2040.

In 1940, this rate was only 5% in Janpan and approximately 10% in Western countries (approx. 7% in Sweden and approx. 9% in USA). The percentage of old people in Sweden and USA had a rise during 1990s whereas people aged 65 and over in Japan had a fall year by year before returning to 5% at the present.

In spite of some fluctuations, the proportion of elder people in three countries is predicted to increase in the next two decades. A more dramatical growth will occur in Japan with over 25% people aged 65 and more.

Votes
Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 187, Rule ID: IN_1990s[1]
Message: The article is probably missing here: 'during the 1990s'.
Suggestion: during the 1990s
...old people in Sweden and USA had a rise during 1990s whereas people aged 65 and over in Japa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
so, whereas, in spite of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.0 29% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 33.7804878049 98% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 665.0 965.302439024 69% => OK
No of words: 151.0 196.424390244 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.40397350993 4.92477711251 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.50545371207 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42011076178 2.65546596893 91% => OK
Unique words: 87.0 106.607317073 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576158940397 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 194.4 283.868780488 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 8.94146341463 89% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.4926829268 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 55.3692152735 43.030603864 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.125 112.824112599 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.875 22.9334400587 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.23603664747 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 3.0 3.83414634146 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.09268292683 122% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174652504548 0.215688989381 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0687540695953 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0638932049251 0.0843802449381 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.125984694742 0.15604864568 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624531996073 0.0819641961636 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.7 13.2329268293 66% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 78.59 61.2550243902 128% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.8 10.3012195122 66% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.24 11.4140731707 72% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.14 8.06136585366 89% => OK
difficult_words: 25.0 40.7170731707 61% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.9970731707 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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