IELTS 10 Test 1 Writing Task 1 - Academic
The first pie chart compares the average amount of energy which is consumed In Australian households, while the second chart shows how much gas is emitted due to this energy use in Australian glasshouses
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overall, what stands out is that, while heating accounted for the majority of energy consumption, water heating is the main producer of greenhouse gas. In addition, cooling and lighting represent the smallest portions in terms of energy consumption and gas emissions.
Apparently, heating is the main consumer, using 42% of the total energy. This is followed by water heating at 30%. Another interesting part is that, while cooling, lighting, and refrigeration account for 2%, 4%, and 7% respectively, they are combined consume almost the same as other appliances which are 15% of the total figure.
Regarding how much gas was released due to this energy use, although heating was the main consumer of energy, it only accounts for 15% of emissions. Water heating is the main source of greenhouse gas, just over the third of the total amount, at 32%. Moreover, the emissions from refrigeration and lighting are double their consumption rate, at 14% and 8% respectively. A similar trend is spotted in other appliances, at 28%.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 205, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...is energy use in Australian glasshouses . overall, what stands out is that, whil...
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Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Overall
...nergy use in Australian glasshouses . overall, what stands out is that, while heating...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, moreover, regarding, second, so, third, while, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.15609756098 127% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 26.0 33.7804878049 77% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1039.0 965.302439024 108% => OK
No of words: 201.0 196.424390244 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.16915422886 4.92477711251 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76529505866 3.73543355544 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84550131911 2.65546596893 107% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 106.607317073 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.582089552239 0.547539520022 106% => OK
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 1.53170731707 196% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.33902439024 69% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.07073170732 374% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.7996415759 43.030603864 130% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.9 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.1 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.7 5.23603664747 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 3.70975609756 189% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 13.2329268293 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.71 11.4140731707 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 40.7170731707 128% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.4329268293 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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