The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK

Essay topics:

The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK.

The line graph compares the percentage of British people going to the cinema in term of age from 1990 to 2010.
Overall, it can be observed that there was an upward trend among four aged groups and the percentage of people aged 44-54 went to cinema was significantly higher than other three groups over the 20-period years.
Having started at 36% in 1990, the proportion of cinema attendance aging 34-44 and 44-54 saw a slightly increase before dropped to approximately 31% and 36% in 2000. In the subsequent 10 years, these figures had reached a peak at 43% for the aged 34-44 and over 50% for the oldest group.
The figure of people aging 24-34 fluctuated between 22% and nearly 30% during the period 10 years before climbed to a peak of 32% in 2005 and remain stabled in the following 5 years. Finally, despite of the tiny declined in the year 2000, the proportion of youngest cinema attendances group then reached a peak of over a quarter at the end of period.

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Average: 8.5 (2 votes)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 94, Rule ID: A_RB_NN[1]
Message: You used an adverb ('slightly') instead an adjective, or a noun ('increase') instead of another adjective.
...ma attendance aging 34-44 and 44-54 saw a slightly increase before dropped to approximately 31% and...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'of the youngest'.
Suggestion: of the youngest
...clined in the year 2000, the proportion of youngest cinema attendances group then reached a...
^^^^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, if, then

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 7.0 43% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.15609756098 32% => OK
Pronoun: 3.0 5.60731707317 54% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 33.7804878049 104% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 797.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 173.0 196.424390244 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60693641618 4.92477711251 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.62669911048 3.73543355544 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4336427141 2.65546596893 92% => OK
Unique words: 104.0 106.607317073 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601156069364 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 225.9 283.868780488 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 8.94146341463 67% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 22.4926829268 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 34.5864456431 43.030603864 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.833333333 112.824112599 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.8333333333 22.9334400587 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.83333333333 5.23603664747 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 3.70975609756 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.104115772402 0.215688989381 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0621355066336 0.103423049105 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061203441427 0.0843802449381 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0782814161937 0.15604864568 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0567609060593 0.0819641961636 69% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 13.2329268293 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 68.44 61.2550243902 112% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.3012195122 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.05 11.4140731707 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.95 8.06136585366 99% => OK
difficult_words: 32.0 40.7170731707 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.4329268293 114% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.9970731707 120% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.0658536585 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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