The picture describe the development of an Island Make a report

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The picture describe the development of an Island. Make a report.

The picture depicts about the development of an Island. From the given figure, it can be concluded that the Island has a lot of changes and modifications. It is modified into a tourism place.

Firstly, the Island was an ordinary land which is surrounded by sea and a beach in the west area. This island consisted of coconut tree and other plants and it was pure without artificial buildings and human activity. It can be summarized that this island and its function had not been maximized before.

After several years, there are some alterations within this land. As the figure shows it begins to be utilized as marine tourism. In the beach side, it has built a swimming pool. Around the coconut tree, some inns has been constructed so all the visitors can enjoy the view, a windy and hot environment inside the inn. In the south east area there is a pier for people who enjoy sailing. There are 2 sailboats which is always ready to be used anytime.

Furthermore, as other tourism places, it offers footpath for the walker and vehicle track with each directions. The vehicle can be used in reception which is located close by the accommodations in the west and east area and in the restaurant in the northern side of receptionist. A visitor is only allowed to walk around between inns and beach, so cars or motorcycles are restricted within this location.

To sum up, this island has improved and it has a good outlook as a tourism places. But, in East are of this island needs more explore as in other sides.

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some inns has been constructed
some inns have been constructed

There are 2 sailboats which is always ready
There are 2 sailboats which are always ready

Sentence: Furthermore, as other tourism places, it offers footpath for the walker and vehicle track with each directions.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to each and directions

But, in East are of this island needs more explore as in other sides.
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Category: Good Excellent
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No. of Different Words: 151 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.05 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.494 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.504 2.4
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 54 50
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 32 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.824 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.783 7.5
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Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.541 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.027 0.07
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