Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do.
Do you agree or disagree?
It is commonly thought that the idea of the elderly people to stay working after retirement is an accepted idea. Personally, I share this view because of two reasons: their financial need and physical and psychological conditions.
Many elderly are living under poverty after they retire from their professional jobs. This is mainly because many of them do not have enough savings to fulfill their daily needs. In Indonesia, for instance, many the retired-individuals live in poor conditions because they have lost financial sources, making them only depend on their children or relatives, and this leads to another problem, such as increasing financial dependency. Therefore, giving these old aged people a chance to be productive in their post-retirement period is not only helping them to meet their needs, but also lowers their dependency on their family members.
Furthermore, many retired people are fit in terms of physical and psychological condition, making them a valuable asset. Generally, these elderly people have substantial experiences and other skills which may not be possessed by the younger generation. Furthermore, older individuals often have a more stable psychological condition compared to younger individuals. Therefore, appointing them a position, such as a foreman in a construction site may bring a great benefit to the employers as they can lead all of the workers wisely.
In conclusion, I firmly believe that the idea of giving chances for older people to have a productive life after retirement is a good choice since these people have mouths to feed and the majority of them have good physical and psychological well-being.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 7.0 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 6.8 132% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 5.60731707317 499% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 3.97073170732 227% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1407.0 965.302439024 146% => OK
No of words: 261.0 196.424390244 133% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3908045977 4.92477711251 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.0193898071 3.73543355544 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.09923085084 2.65546596893 117% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 106.607317073 140% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.570881226054 0.547539520022 104% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 283.868780488 157% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.45097560976 117% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 8.94146341463 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.4926829268 116% => OK
Sentence length SD: 99.8242956399 43.030603864 232% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 140.7 112.824112599 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1 22.9334400587 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.0 5.23603664747 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 3.70975609756 216% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.13902439024 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.199855965873 0.215688989381 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783525157326 0.103423049105 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667820349354 0.0843802449381 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135945843586 0.15604864568 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0615815787132 0.0819641961636 75% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 13.2329268293 128% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 61.2550243902 60% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.3012195122 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 11.4140731707 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.74 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 40.7170731707 155% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.4329268293 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.9970731707 113% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.0658536585 108% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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