The table below shows how young people in Tokyo Japan listened to music over the previous month The pie chart shows a record company s international findings about whether people preferred live or recorded music Summarize the information by selecting a

The stipulated chart depicts the information regarding the youngsters way of listening music in various channels in Tokyo, Japan. The mentioned parameters are Live music, MP3- player, Internet and CD's and the diagram illustrates the proportion in which the type of music form people want to experience.

It has been clear from the data that more than two third (79%) of the male preferred MP3-players for listening music followed by live music (69%). Only one fifth (19%) of the young men loved to enjoy music from CD's. Whereas, girls always recommended live music (44%) over other music channels. A considerable proportion of 42% young females relayed on internet for the same. CD's had been the least popular music channel among them.

Looking in to the pie chart, we can see that overall a massive 70% individuals favored live concerts over other forms of music. One fourth portion of the people selected recorded music as their personal choice. While, a mere 4% people doesn't have nay king of favorite choices.

In conclusion, Both male and female opted live music as their favorite choice despite the gender factor. In most of the categories men's proportion were higher except CD's.

Votes
Average: 7.9 (4 votes)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, regarding, so, third, whereas, while, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 1.00243902439 100% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 6.8 44% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 3.15609756098 95% => OK
Pronoun: 7.0 5.60731707317 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 28.0 33.7804878049 83% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 3.97073170732 151% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 996.0 965.302439024 103% => OK
No of words: 197.0 196.424390244 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05583756345 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.74642080493 3.73543355544 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.49542858087 2.65546596893 94% => OK
Unique words: 130.0 106.607317073 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.659898477157 0.547539520022 121% => OK
syllable_count: 294.3 283.868780488 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 1.53170731707 131% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.33902439024 92% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 8.94146341463 123% => OK
Sentence length: 17.0 22.4926829268 76% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.9712866027 43.030603864 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.5454545455 112.824112599 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.9090909091 22.9334400587 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.54545454545 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.13902439024 88% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.09268292683 98% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.302940351219 0.215688989381 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.10957574004 0.103423049105 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0671913902416 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177766853894 0.15604864568 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0732588935433 0.0819641961636 89% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 13.2329268293 86% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 61.2550243902 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.3012195122 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.77 11.4140731707 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.73 8.06136585366 108% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 40.7170731707 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 11.4329268293 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.9970731707 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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