you have recently been employed to work in the foreign country, but you are yet to start. one of your relatives is also interested in going with you and work for the same company. Write a letter to your manager and say,- Tell him about yourself and your

Essay topics:

you have recently been employed to work in the foreign country, but you are yet to start. one of your relatives is also interested in going with you and work for the same company. Write a letter to your manager and say,
- Tell him about yourself and your job
-introduce your relative and say what kind of job he/sh is interested in
- why do you recommend her for this job.

Dear Sir,

Greetings of the day. I am Bhumika suryavanashi, and I have been offered a position of operation manager at your Vancouver branch where I will be joining the assignment as on 5th December 2016. I am writing this letter in order to recommend one of my relatives for the position vacant with our organization in HR department at the same branch office.

During the interview process, we had a discussion about this vacancy of HR executive wherein you had asked a reference from me. Recently, One of my relatives has approached me on the occasion of see off party at my home to recommend him to our organization for any opening in HR department. It strikes me our discussion and thought to forward his resume for your kind perusal. I am knowing Mr. Manish Patel since the school time and I find him in the range of your requirements from his CV.He is very enthusiastic, adaptable, flexible and go-getter person which makes him a deserving candidate for this position. Moreover, He is very good at communication and carrying 5 years of experience in corporate HR . Since He is trying to move Canada for his bright future , this job offer can give him an additional support in getting PR for Canada. It is worth to mention here that he has cleared his IELTS test with 7.5 band which proves his communication skills.

Please find the attached CV herewith. I am sure that his qualifications, experience, and knowledge can commensurate the requirements of the position and you will give him an opportunity to represent himself in person. For anymore information please feel free to talk.

Thanking you,

Yours Faithfully,

Bhumika Suryavanshi.

Votes
Average: 8.8 (3 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 380, Rule ID: NON_ACTION_CONTINUOUS[4]
Message: The verb know is usually not used with a continuous form, use the simple form instead. Suggestion: 'know'
Suggestion: know
...ard his resume for your kind perusal. I am knowing Mr. Manish Patel since the school time ...
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...ard his resume for your kind perusal. I am knowing Mr. Manish Patel since the school time ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: He
... range of your requirements from his CV.He is very enthusiastic, adaptable, flexib...
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ng 5 years of experience in corporate HR . Since He is trying to move Canada for h...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ing to move Canada for his bright future , this job offer can give him an addition...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, moreover, so, thus

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.0 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 1.00243902439 399% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 5.60731707317 856% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 39.0 33.7804878049 115% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 3.97073170732 403% => Less nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1384.0 965.302439024 143% => OK
No of words: 281.0 196.424390244 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92526690391 4.92477711251 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09427095027 3.73543355544 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01206023116 2.65546596893 113% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 106.607317073 159% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604982206406 0.547539520022 110% => OK
syllable_count: 431.1 283.868780488 152% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.45097560976 103% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 1.53170731707 718% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 0.0 0.114634146341 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.33902439024 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.07073170732 93% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.482926829268 414% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.2431567321 43.030603864 135% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.8571428571 112.824112599 88% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0714285714 22.9334400587 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.57142857143 5.23603664747 30% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 1.69756097561 295% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 3.70975609756 323% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.211256605826 0.215688989381 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0681268359236 0.103423049105 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588037731926 0.0843802449381 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0906865127755 0.15604864568 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0614394170474 0.0819641961636 75% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 13.2329268293 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 61.2550243902 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.3012195122 96% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 11.4140731707 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.06136585366 107% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 40.7170731707 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.4329268293 96% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.0658536585 90% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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