You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and can’t stay the whole course.
Write a letter to the course director. In your letter:
• explain your interest in the course
• describe your problems
• find out if a refund is possible
Dear Sir,
I am writing you in the response of an advertisement on your website for a tennis course in London, England.
Since my childhood, I am great fan of tennis, but, unfortunately never get a chance to learn the same. After careful consideration on the advertisement, I thought of joining your training course that is commencing in the month of August. However, there are few problems that are restricting me to join your course. Firstly, I do not have my own racket. Secondly, as I have poor eye sight, I need to wear glasses all the time. Thus, whether, it is possible for a person like me to join your classes.
Moreover, in the month of December,as I need to go back to my home town for some work, is it possible for any refund of the fees during that month. Also, whether, I can keep the same membership even after coming back from India or needs to enroll again.
I am looking forward to hearing soon from you.
Yours faithfully
James
I am great fan of tennis
I am a great fan of tennis
flaws:
More sentences varieties wanted. Try to use less pronouns or not to use pronouns (like 'It, I, They, We, You...') as the subject of a sentence.
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Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
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No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
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No. of Different Words: 108 100
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.632 4.0
Average Word Length: 4.264 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.537 2.4
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Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
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Sentence Length SD: 7.9 7.5
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Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.105 0.07
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