A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public.Write a letter to the company

I am very happy to know your company's sponsorship for local children's sports club or conduct concerts to make us enjoy our leisure time. First of all, I would like to thank for this proposal because your sponsorship would really help the people whoever struggling to pay their own sports needs like gloves, pads, helmets. We are welcoming to have open-sir concerts in our community but the problem is most of the people aged ranges from 60 - 70. Moreover, 70% of people are doing night shift. So if you sponsor the money for open-air concerts would be obsolete. Nevertheless, open-sir concerts would make us listen to some extraordinary musics, understand different cultures as well as it would create a happy environment around us.
I would like to suggest that if you sponsor our local sports club, so everyone in the team would be physically active and participate in the tournaments. There might be possibility if they could win as you helped them. Thanks for the opportunity to write about your company sponsorship feedback and it would certainly make you understandable on what we need.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, really, so, well, as well as, first of all

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 7.48453608247 80% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 4.92783505155 223% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 1.0 3.03092783505 33% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 32.9175257732 76% => OK
Preposition: 21.0 26.3917525773 80% => OK
Nominalization: 1.0 3.85567010309 26% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 909.0 937.175257732 97% => OK
No of words: 184.0 206.0 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9402173913 4.54256449028 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.68302321012 3.78020617076 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76683900883 2.54303337028 109% => OK
Unique words: 120.0 127.690721649 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.652173913043 0.622605031667 105% => OK
syllable_count: 273.6 290.88556701 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.13402061856 44% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 12.6804123711 71% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 46.6976087896 44.8134815571 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.0 76.5299724578 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4444444444 16.8248392259 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.11111111111 4.34317383033 210% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.29896907216 47% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 2.54639175258 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.49484536082 134% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.206947546676 0.216113520407 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0905444414005 0.0766984524023 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0798825754572 0.0603063233224 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167092500348 0.12726935374 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0182995310349 0.0580467560999 32% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 8.37731958763 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 70.7449484536 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 7.45979381443 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 8.71597938144 130% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.72 7.59969072165 102% => OK
difficult_words: 36.0 41.2886597938 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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