You are a student who wants to apply to green pines college. you are experiencing financial problems at the moment.Write a letter to the principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial

Essay topics:

You are a student who wants to apply to green pines college. you are experiencing financial problems at the moment.

Write a letter to the principal of the college explaining your situation and ask for information on scholarships or other means of financial help available.

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to enquire about the grants or concession if available against undergraduate degree at Green Pines College. Firstly, I would like to apply for a undergraduate degree at green pines because of financial crisis I am facing at the moment.

Secondly, I would really appreciate if you can take time out of your busy schedule and share the valuable information on acquiring funds from different sources. Furthermore, I would be thankful to you, if you can check my eligibility criteria under Federal Education Scheme.

Finally, I would be glad if you can drop me an email with compiled list of scholarships offered by university and external finance schemes available at lower rate of Interest throughout the United States of America.

I am looking forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours FaithFully
FaizalReza

Votes
Average: 5.6 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 169, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ege. Firstly, I would like to apply for a undergraduate degree at green pines bec...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, furthermore, if, look, really, second, secondly, so

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 2.0 7.48453608247 27% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 4.92783505155 142% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 0.0 3.03092783505 0% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 32.9175257732 52% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 728.0 937.175257732 78% => OK
No of words: 140.0 206.0 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.2 4.54256449028 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.43979062825 3.78020617076 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92494549051 2.54303337028 115% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.707142857143 0.622605031667 114% => OK
syllable_count: 230.4 290.88556701 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.360824742268 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 0.824742268041 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.83505154639 54% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 1.44329896907 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 12.6804123711 55% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 16.3608247423 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 60.7309220905 44.8134815571 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.0 76.5299724578 136% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 16.8248392259 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8571428571 4.34317383033 250% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 2.54639175258 39% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 7.41237113402 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 1.49484536082 67% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.94845360825 25% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249659485312 0.216113520407 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.104737680315 0.0766984524023 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0553116370385 0.0603063233224 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122778462914 0.12726935374 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0627005395697 0.0580467560999 108% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 8.37731958763 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 70.7449484536 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 7.45979381443 149% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 8.71597938144 148% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.14 7.59969072165 120% => OK
difficult_words: 40.0 41.2886597938 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 8.62886597938 127% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 8.54432989691 117% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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