You have just bought a new mobile phone from a website on the internet When it was delivered the phone was faulty Write a letter to the website In the letter introduce yourself explain the situation state what action you want to be taken

Essay topics:

You have just bought a new mobile phone from a website on the internet. When it was delivered, the phone was faulty.

Write a letter to the website. In the letter:

introduce yourself
explain the situation
state what action you want to be taken

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my strong disappointed experience regarding my cell phone that I bought it from your city store on 11th of December. Please allow me to explain my situation in more detail. My name is Kevin and I have been loyal client of your multinational company since your firm was established.
As you can easily see in your data records , I purchased a Samsung Galaxy mobile phone since it has much more helpful features in compared to other ones.

However, after using it for a while, some problems started appear. First problem is that the camera of phone is not working properly, I mean that whenever I tried to take photo, it shutdowns suddenly without informing any sign on the screen. This make taking photo much more difficult when I indeed need it. If you are thinking that is only this ? Not, it has not finished. The other problem of cell phone is related to its battery which finished almost each six hours. Despite fact that I did not play any application or game on my cell phone, I noticed that it finished immediately in short time. To be honest, I am really surprised to discover such kind of fault in highly expensive model.

Would you consider that I am requesting demand of full payment that I made in advance or could you replace new one instead of fixing old one.

I look forward to hearing positive response from you in the near future.

Your faithfully.

Votes
Average: 7.5 (5 votes)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
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Line 6, column 328, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...en I indeed need it. If you are thinking that is only this ? Not, it has not fin...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, look, really, regarding, so, while, i mean, in short, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 7.48453608247 120% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 4.92783505155 81% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 3.03092783505 330% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 48.0 32.9175257732 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 34.0 26.3917525773 129% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 3.85567010309 130% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1185.0 937.175257732 126% => OK
No of words: 255.0 206.0 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64705882353 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 3.78020617076 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48436800044 2.54303337028 98% => OK
Unique words: 169.0 127.690721649 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.662745098039 0.622605031667 106% => OK
syllable_count: 373.5 290.88556701 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.13402061856 120% => OK
Article: 1.0 0.824742268041 121% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 1.83505154639 163% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 12.6804123711 110% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 16.3608247423 110% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.8219050441 44.8134815571 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 84.6428571429 76.5299724578 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2142857143 16.8248392259 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.78571428571 4.34317383033 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 2.54639175258 79% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 1.49484536082 401% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.94845360825 51% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191389035431 0.216113520407 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494623482879 0.0766984524023 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0396885825144 0.0603063233224 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0974063476789 0.12726935374 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.00809301624262 0.0580467560999 14% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.6 8.37731958763 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 70.7449484536 87% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 3.82989690722 81% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 7.45979381443 122% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 8.71597938144 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.31 7.59969072165 109% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 41.2886597938 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 8.62886597938 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 8.54432989691 108% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 8.15463917526 123% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 87.0786516854 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.75 Out of 9
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