You have planned to study in Australia. You have sent a letter to a college, but you have not received a reply from the college. Write a letter to the college principal. In your letter,
- you should give details of the course that you wished to do,
- say why do you choose to study at the college,
- say why you need the reply soon.
I am Mr Shreyas Parab, from India, completed my Bachelors in Mechanical Engineering from Mumbai University. I have four years of technical sales experience; I am interested in opting for your university's Business Management course. As mentioned in an application form, the course code is M234567; which usually commences from month of June as shown on the online portal.
Melbourne University is among the top universities across the world which offers Business Courses. As per the academic curriculum of this course, out of 24 months, 18 months are on field working experience with the reputed firms globally, which makes it more interesting. Moreover, the student recommends that university offers great knowledge and experience, proving fruitful for the career.
Within the next two months, the course will begin. The required documentation has already been sent to the university via post and email as requested; the visa process will also take more time than usual due to pandemic. I do not want to miss this opportunity and wait for another year. I request you to look into this matter and provide feedback as early as possible.
I have attached the copy of application form along with the documents sent earlier.
Yours faithfully,
Shreyas Parab
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 146, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... the academic curriculum of this course, out of 24 months, 18 months are on fiel...
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Line 2, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...culum of this course, out of 24 months, 18 months are on field working experienc...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...provide feedback as early as possible. I have attached the copy of application f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, look, moreover, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.48453608247 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 4.92783505155 41% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 5.05154639175 79% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 15.0 32.9175257732 46% => OK
Preposition: 23.0 26.3917525773 87% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.85567010309 182% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1059.0 937.175257732 113% => OK
No of words: 202.0 206.0 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24257425743 4.54256449028 115% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.76996954942 3.78020617076 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84606969944 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 142.0 127.690721649 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.70297029703 0.622605031667 113% => OK
syllable_count: 325.8 290.88556701 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.41237113402 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.13402061856 77% => OK
Article: 5.0 0.824742268041 606% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 2.0 1.83505154639 109% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 12.6804123711 95% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 16.3608247423 98% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3562929865 44.8134815571 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.25 76.5299724578 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 16.8248392259 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.0 4.34317383033 46% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 2.54639175258 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 7.41237113402 94% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.94845360825 127% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.10260727 0.216113520407 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0348243481935 0.0766984524023 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0344265564681 0.0603063233224 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0583916400333 0.12726935374 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0347939696442 0.0580467560999 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 8.37731958763 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 70.7449484536 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 3.82989690722 230% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 7.45979381443 127% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 8.71597938144 147% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.35 7.59969072165 123% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 41.2886597938 153% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 8.62886597938 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 8.54432989691 98% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 8.15463917526 159% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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