You recently bought a piece of equipment for you kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken.Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter: describe the problem with the equipment. explain what happened when you ph

Essay topics:

You recently bought a piece of equipment for you kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken.

Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter:

describe the problem with the equipment.
explain what happened when you phoned the shop.
say what you would like the manager to do.

Dear Sir/Madam,
My name is Mohammed Aslam. I am writing to you regarding the technical problem of the grinder which I bought from your department store.
Firstly, the grinder is not working properly in full load. Actually as the grinder's technical specification, it can run in full rpm speed with 5kg of grinding material. But the motor in the grinder is not rotating in maximum target force with 4kg of rice.
Once I found this technical issue. I phoned to your shop as a first time but nobody picked the call. I called second time, the sales representative named Mr.DDD is received my call and did not respond well and not grasping my request also.
So I kindly request you to exchange the grinder with the new equipment or refund my money as soon as possible.
I look forward to hear from you the best offer and request to not to create any inconvenience to the customer.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Comments

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 262, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Once” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... maximum target force with 4kg of rice. Once I found this technical issue. I phoned ...
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Line 4, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...maximum target force with 4kg of rice. Once I found this technical issue. I pho...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 241, Rule ID: ALSO_SENT_END[1]
Message: 'Also' is not used at the end of the sentence. Use 'as well' instead.
Suggestion: as well
...espond well and not grasping my request also. So I kindly request you to ex...
^^^^
Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...well and not grasping my request also. So I kindly request you to exchange the ...
^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 16, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[7]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'to hearing'.
Suggestion: to hearing
...ey as soon as possible. I look forward to hear from you the best offer and request to ...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ate any inconvenience to the customer.
^^

Discourse Markers used:
['actually', 'also', 'but', 'first', 'firstly', 'if', 'look', 'regarding', 'second', 'so', 'well']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.234285714286 0.220444632235 106% => OK
Verbs: 0.154285714286 0.167888034529 92% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0628571428571 0.0606518309736 104% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0914285714286 0.0506257000042 181% => Less adverbs wanted.
Pronouns: 0.0914285714286 0.118615021944 77% => OK
Prepositions: 0.0857142857143 0.107062808482 80% => OK
Participles: 0.0457142857143 0.041066498444 111% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.7136000625 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.04 0.0385302599488 104% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00132118243153 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0857142857143 0.0714148451538 120% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.00571428571429 0.0191574576366 30% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.00571428571429 0.00930345855455 61% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 900.0 1141.60824742 79% => OK
No of words: 157.0 206.134020619 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.73248407643 5.53046319177 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.78085437643 94% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.31847133758 0.284621296913 112% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.229299363057 0.211203875043 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.146496815287 0.133321485273 110% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.0891719745223 0.0843313296314 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7136000625 2.54303337028 107% => OK
Unique words: 99.0 127.690721649 78% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.630573248408 0.622163163488 101% => OK
Word variations: 57.933084965 62.8969750728 92% => OK
How many sentences: 10.0 12.9587628866 77% => OK
Sentence length: 15.7 16.4300151701 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.4628151834 44.7399317507 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.0 90.9928171075 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.7 16.4300151701 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.1 0.613754768223 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.29896907216 116% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.09278350515 287% => OK
Readability: 38.6299363057 37.5504026743 103% => OK
Elegance: 1.08474576271 1.13073093955 96% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.389317687701 0.331212695627 118% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.100232396212 0.0927372745006 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0821271876805 0.0736520305886 112% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.66190593003 0.579516596996 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.243792266413 0.180689518051 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.15845627638 0.122183219658 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.101894316189 0.0765303033291 133% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.191779240519 0.211926503985 90% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.034439448319 0.0737400523855 47% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.226650547044 0.203819188451 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0296392854844 0.067151250289 44% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 7.45360824742 40% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 1.48453608247 135% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.0206185567 124% => OK
Positive topic words: 2.0 4.73195876289 42% => OK
Negative topic words: 2.0 1.03092783505 194% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 2.56701030928 117% => OK
Total topic words: 7.0 8.32989690722 84% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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