In Britain , when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other people wheres there are nurses to look after them . Sometimes the government has to pay for this care . Who should be responsible for our old people ?

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In Britain , when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other people wheres there are nurses to look after them . Sometimes the government has to pay for this care . Who should be responsible for our old people ?

Many old people in Britain , after a lifetime of hard work and the toil of bringing up children , are put into homes for the elderly by their families . There , they are looked after by professionals nurses , and this is sometimes at the expense of the government . However , this situation has raised controversy about whether we extend to our elders the care and respect they deserve .

The critics of this system say that it is the duty of the family to look after its senior members in the years when they are no longer able to work . They point out that in retirement homes old people tend to feel useless and unwanted by their family members , who seldom come to see them . In addition , there is a evidence that younger people benefit from the experience and wisdom of older people who live with them on a daily basis .

On the other hand , those who support the system say that retired parents can be a burden to young families . Not only is it expensive to support old people who have little or no income , but the fact that old people are often ill and need a great deal of looking after can be too much for their busy children .

In my opinion , neither side is completely right . Old people in good healthy and with enough finances to support themselves can be a great help to their children . For instance , they can look after their grandchildren while children are out at work . On the other hand , sick and penniless old people are better off being looked after in retirement homes at government expenses .

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Discourse Markers used:
['but', 'however', 'if', 'look', 'so', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'in my opinion', 'on the other hand']

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.214285714286 0.247107183377 87% => OK
Verbs: 0.146258503401 0.155533422707 94% => OK
Adjectives: 0.108843537415 0.0946595960268 115% => OK
Adverbs: 0.030612244898 0.0501214627716 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0646258503401 0.0437548338989 148% => OK
Prepositions: 0.149659863946 0.122226691241 122% => OK
Participles: 0.0238095238095 0.0403226058552 59% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.36002464434 2.80594681477 84% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030612244898 0.0326793684256 94% => OK
Particles: 0.0136054421769 0.00163938923432 830% => Less particles wanted.
Determiners: 0.0884353741497 0.0861772015684 103% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0136054421769 0.021408717616 64% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0170068027211 0.011925033212 143% => OK

Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 1553.0 1933.35771543 80% => OK
No of words: 294.0 316.048096192 93% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28231292517 6.12580529183 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.14082457966 4.20517956788 98% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.261904761905 0.374742101984 70% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.170068027211 0.28420135186 60% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.0952380952381 0.203846283523 47% => More words length more than 7 chars wanted.
words length more than 8 chars: 0.047619047619 0.137316102897 35% => More words length more than 8 chars wanted.
Word Length SD: 2.36002464434 2.80594681477 84% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 176.037074148 82% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489795918367 0.56093040696 87% => OK
Word variations: 48.0429814569 60.7387585426 79% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 24.5 20.7743622355 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.1831759554 49.517814964 73% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.416666667 127.492653851 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5 20.7743622355 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.833333333333 0.814263465372 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 30.0 3.99599198397 751% => Correct essay format wanted or double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
Readability: 41.5068027211 49.1944974215 84% => OK
Elegance: 1.60563380282 1.69124875643 95% => OK

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.460245300162 0.332605444948 138% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.12922349909 0.102741220458 126% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0567951396215 0.0668466124924 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.57488382355 0.534860350844 107% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.127522738081 0.148594505496 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.187790099155 0.134430193775 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0583255483514 0.0742795772207 79% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.359216876257 0.324371583561 111% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0349435044395 0.0638462369009 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.310507083391 0.228012699653 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0295273205697 0.058150111329 51% => OK

Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.68436873747 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.41683366733 88% => OK
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 2.5751503006 116% => OK
Neutral topic words: 3.0 1.9629258517 153% => OK
Total topic words: 12.0 10.4468937876 115% => OK

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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9