The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given chart illustrates the predicted trend of the elderly of three countries in a century from 1940 to 2040.

At a first glance, it is apparent that all three countries have a increase at the end of the century in 2040, nearly 4 times the beginning at 1940.

The proportion of elderly in Japan, Sweden and USA is 5%, 7% and 9% at the turn of century. Both Japan and Sweden shows a similar growth at first few decades, but divergent at 1990, and predicted a parallel increase at 2030. It is predicted that former will nearly 4 times 1940; latter, 2 times.

When it comes to USA, its proportion of people who aged 65 even more reveals a drop after 1940, while rebounds at present, and it is predicted to surge and peak at 28% in the future, 5 times the beginning.

In conclusion, although 3 countries have different patterns of growth shown in the chart, they all may group together in the future.

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Sentence: In conclusion, although 3 countries have different patterns of growth shown in the chart, they all may group together in the future.
Description: The word group is not usually used as a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to group

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