The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion will be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.
Having job is main necessary nowadays because people must work to have income monthly to continue their life. Most people choose a single occupation in their life. I completely agree to have several careers and continue study are needed in this era.
Producing more money can be received from many ways for instance, having several careers and getting further education. From continuing study, people are able to get a good career in the future because they already have certain skill and can be applied in their job. If some people have many jobs, they should be able to manage time correctly because managing time is significant aspect to keep what they have. However, several peole think that one job is enough for them because they cannot get another job or time management. Usually, they work strictly and loyalty with one big company, therefore they are satisfy what they achieve from monthly salary.
Sometimes, people feel bored with their daily activity, so many people want to thight the work schedule with different activity. For example, an employee has a job in big company, but this employee also become entrepreneur because this employee open some business in hom or via onlne. This way can reduce bored feeling because people have different activity in the same time, but the consequences from this method are people cannot have free time and can make stressful, therefore time management is very essential in every occupation.
To sum up, earning more money and avoiding bored feeling can be gotten from having several careers and further education. So many people choose this way nowadays because they think that it is a better method to continue their life.
continue study are needed in this era.
continuing study is needed in this era.
because managing time is significant aspect
because managing time is a significant aspect
but this employee also become entrepreneur
but this employee can also become an entrepreneur
Sentence: For example, an employee has a job in big company, but this employee also become entrepreneur because this employee open some business in hom or via onlne.
Description: The fragment employee open some is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace open with verb, present tense, 3rd person singular
because people have different activity in the same time
because people have different activities in the same time
Sentence: However, several peole think that one job is enough for them because they cannot get another job or time management.
Error: peole Suggestion: people
Sentence: Sometimes, people feel bored with their daily activity, so many people want to thight the work schedule with different activity.
Error: thight Suggestion: No alternate word
Sentence: For example, an employee has a job in big company, but this employee also become entrepreneur because this employee open some business in hom or via onlne.
Error: hom Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: onlne Suggestion: one
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No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 5.0 out of 9
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 279 350
No. of Characters: 1369 1500
No. of Different Words: 141 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.087 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.907 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.267 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 73 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 39 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 21 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 21.462 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.067 7.5
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Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.392 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5