It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician.
Apparently, some people believe that talents in several things in life could be brought as a blessed since they was born. In any instance, sport or music talent can came from their parents genes. But some people who has not any talent as they born, it also possible to have good skill in sport or music as long as they make a lot of exercise and practising them instead of inherent from their parent genes. In my opinions, there are some strong arguments on behalf of each option. I will try to discuss this topic considering with advantages of both view below.
To begin, the most attractive feature of talent as a blessing since they was born is they have not to do a lot of effort to be good in sport or music. At that point, they can automatically play on it without any difficulties, though must be just seeing their parents do it first, then, they duplicate it in any order. In any case, talent as a blessed can steadily decreasing if they are have no any trigger to develop their skill by practicing it.
On the other hand, some people who did not bring any talent when they were born tend to have more experience in practicing and overcome big challenge to be good at sport or music because they cannot do those particular activities automatically. Thus, new challenges give rise to new opportunities and taking those opportunity is very useful for their self-improvement.
In conclusion, recording to point of view it is not always about talent can stated as a blessing or not, but how you can develop your talent by practicing it to make self-improvement at sport or music.
as a blessed since they was born.
as a bless since they were born.
sport or music talent can came from
sport or music talent can come from
But some people who has not any talent as they born,
But some people who have not any talent as they are born,
it also possible to have good skill
it is also possible to have good skill
Sentence: To begin, the most attractive feature of talent as a blessing since they was born is they have not to do a lot of effort to be good in sport or music.
Description: The token is is not usually followed by a pronoun, personal, nominative, not 3rd person singular
Suggestion: Refer to is and they
Sentence: In any case, talent as a blessed can steadily decreasing if they are have no any trigger to develop their skill by practicing it.
Description: A verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive is not usually followed by a verb 'to have', uninflected present tense, infinitive or
Suggestion: Refer to are and have
it is not always about talent can stated as a blessing or not,
Description: two verbs in one sentence. can you re-write this sentence?
Sentence: In conclusion, recording to point of view it is not always about talent can stated as a blessing or not, but how you can develop your talent by practicing it to make self-improvement at sport or music.
Description: A modal auxillary is not usually followed by a verb, past participle
Suggestion: Refer to can and stated
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