In the past shopping was a routine domestic task Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby To what extent do you think this is a positive trend

Essay topics:

In the past, shopping was a routine domestic task. Many people nowadays regard it as a hobby.
To what extent do you think this is a positive trend?

Long time ago make purchases was considered be a household duty. Currently it’s perceived as a hobby. From my point of view, I don’t agree to this trend.
Younger generations spend time with friends in malls. They believe that mall is a safe environment. Families more and more often choose mall to hang out together. In modern time, people are always busy during the week. Malls contain a huge variety of shops. This character would help people to spend money easily either on leisure activities such as cinema, either on chores such as doing the grocery shopping. Sometimes they buy items that they don’t need. In case of groceries such as it means food waste. This is easily applicable to clothes shopping too. In fact, nowadays fast fashion industries are in developing, both as physic and as online stores.
Environmental experts say that the develop of fast fashion franchising is dangerous for the environment. There are many reasons for that. First of all, production of these clothes is placed in poor country in which the labour and textiles cost are lower than in the western Europe. Fabrics are most of the time made of petroleum derivates. In the situation in which they must be recycled, this action is going to be a high environmental impact.
In the end shopping is an unproductive activity too. In my opinion families should spend time in a better way. An example could be going to museums. Even healthier could be spend free time enjoying some open-air activities, like riding bike or just exploring woods.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, so, in fact, such as, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 10.4138276553 38% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 24.0651302605 75% => OK
Preposition: 35.0 41.998997996 83% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.3376753507 48% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1278.0 1615.20841683 79% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91538461538 5.12529762239 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59886183554 2.80592935109 93% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 176.041082164 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.634615384615 0.561755894193 113% => OK
syllable_count: 394.2 506.74238477 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 16.0721442886 137% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.2975951904 54% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8804412238 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 58.0909090909 106.682146367 54% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 11.8181818182 20.7667163134 57% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 2.54545454545 7.06120827912 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 3.4128256513 322% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0944384638221 0.244688304435 39% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0246013303992 0.084324248473 29% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0335307543117 0.0667982634062 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0533160277897 0.151304729494 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0297821662811 0.056905535591 52% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.7 13.0946893788 59% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.77 50.2224549098 137% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.4 11.3001002004 57% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 10.37 12.4159519038 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.58950901804 93% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 78.4519038076 80% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 4.5 9.78957915832 46% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.1190380762 63% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.7795591182 74% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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