Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.
To what extend do you agree or disagree ?

Nowadays, there are lots of advertisement on television or on the streets. Some people think that the advertising boosts the sales of goods and it encourages people to buy things unnecessarily. This arguments may be true. In my country, many advertising companies produce advertisements with famous and popular actors or singers. People, especially youngsters, buy goods that their favourite singer advertise, although they do not really need the products.

Also, on the television screen, a product may look gorgeous and good quality. As a result of it, people often buy goods without enough consideration. Consumers may not actually need it but they buy good impulsively soon after they watch the advertising. Furthermore, as many customers buy a particular product due to its advertising campaign, the other people may be affected by the trend, even if the product is not of the real needs of the society.

On the other hand, there are various aspects against these arguments. Moreover, it is people's choice to make a decision to buy goods. Advertising may be not a cause of customer's habits. Individuals have their own spending habits. If they have got enough disposable income, then the right to make a decision is given to them. No one actually can judge whether the goods sold are the real needs of the society or not. In addition, as there should be a limited amount of disposable income consumers are able to spend, people try to allocate their budgets. They cannot be simply swayed by those advertisements.

In conclusion, as customers have their own strong opinion and standard of good quality goods, it is better to leave them to make their own decision in buy goods. It is fairly difficult to say everyone is swayed by advertising and buy good impulsively. However, in sensitive area of businesses such a toy industries, it may be necessary to band advertising to those children have not got enough ability to control themselves or to know what they need.

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Sentence: This arguments may be true.
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a product may look gorgeous and good quality.
a product may look gorgeous and in good quality.

their own decision in buy goods
their own decision in buying goods
their own decision to buy goods

it may be necessary to band advertising to those children have not got enough ability
it may be necessary to ban advertising to those children who have not got enough ability

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