You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
You would like to buy some electrical goods at a shop in a nearby town.
Write a letter to the shop and ask if they have the things you want or whether they will be able to order them. Ask what the prices are and how long they will be able to hold the goods for you.
You should write at least 150 words.
You do NOT need to write your own address. Begin your letter as follows:
Dear Sir,
Dear Sir,
I am writing to enquire if you have various electrical goods that I want to buy. I have tried local shops in my town but I am not to find the exact products that I want.
I am looking for a new Sony DVD player, a charger for Nokia Lumia 800 phone, and rechargeable batteries for Sony (AA size). Do you have these items in stock at your store in Bradford?
If not, can you pre-order them for me before this weekend as I will be in Bradford this weekend for some work. I would also like to know what are the prices for each of these items so that if these specific items are expensive then I can look for their cheaper alternatives. Furthermore, for how many days will you be able to hold these items for me? As I have already mentioned, I am travelling to Bradford this weekend so is it possible for you to hold these items for me till this weekend?
Looking forward to hear from you and hopefully you will be providing me with the information that I asked for in this letter.
Thanking you,
Jatin M
but I am not to find the exact products that I want.
but I can not to find the exact products that I want.
flaws:
Don't duplicate sentences:
'for how many days will you be able to hold these items for me? As I have already mentioned, I am travelling to Bradford this weekend so is it possible for you to hold these items for me till this weekend?'
Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.5 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 1 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 195 350
No. of Characters: 792 1500
No. of Different Words: 110 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 3.737 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.062 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.311 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 36 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 32 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 19 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 12 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.727 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.635 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.545 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.413 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.78 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.285 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5