It is widely acknowledged that the well-rounded development of children depends on various factors, either the family or the society. Although families have profound effects on children, I believe the influence coming from outside the family plays a vital role in their growth.
On one hand, it is understandable why families can be key in children’s development. First, families contribute to forming children’s characteristics and manners. Kids, in fact, can easily imitate parent’s gestures, behaviors, and even personalities, which means if parents are kind and helpful to others, their children will be the same when they grow up. In contrast, if children regularly see scenes of domestic violence from their parents, they tend to bully their friends or have antisocial behaviors. Therefore, parents should control their behaviors and teach children great things to guide them to become good people.
On the other hand, social factors have a significant role to play in the advancement of children. First, some individuals can motivate children’s efforts in certain aspects to be more fulfilled. Many young students, nowadays, in fact, have their own idols, such as singers, sportsmen, or celebrities, which not only help children live more purposefully but also inspire them to get better academic performance. Second, society discourages children from over-dependence on their family. For example, if children attend kindergarten school at an early, they can learn how to take care of themselves, such as going to bed on time or having the ability to personal hygiene, fostering their discipline.
In conclusion, although families have powerful influences on children, especially their thinking and behaviors, I contend that other factors from outside also contribute to the far-reaching development of children.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63898916968 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1122693222 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620938628159 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4341079015 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.153846154 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365081092009 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149790474455 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125980029679 0.0667982634062 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288623781955 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130661946775 0.056905535591 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, in fact, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 24.0651302605 87% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1562.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.63898916968 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.1122693222 2.80592935109 111% => OK
Unique words: 172.0 176.041082164 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.620938628159 0.561755894193 111% => OK
syllable_count: 463.5 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.4341079015 49.4020404114 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.153846154 106.682146367 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3076923077 20.7667163134 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.76923076923 7.06120827912 138% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.365081092009 0.244688304435 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.149790474455 0.084324248473 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125980029679 0.0667982634062 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.288623781955 0.151304729494 191% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.130661946775 0.056905535591 230% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.58 8.58950901804 112% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.