Art classes, such as painting and drawing, are as important for children's development as other subjects, so it should be compulsory in high school. Do you agree or disagree?
I agree that art-related subjects are crucial for the development of children. However, this does not mean that these courses should be added into the curriculum of high school as compulsory subjects as will now be explained.
There is no doubt that attending art classes not only develop children’s minds but also hone their soft skills such as observation skill and hand-eye coordination. For example, if you want to sketch the portrait of somebody, it is crucial to notice even the littlist thing in their body or else your work of art might become a piece of trash. Art education also plays a vital role in boosting creativity. For example, drawing and painting a picture allows youngsters to let their imagination run wild since they are encouraged to express their idea in an unique and genuine way.
Although art subjects make an equal contribution to the growth of a child, I believe that they should be made optional rather than compulsory. The primary reason is that art classes are often considered as a waste of time and resources, espeacilly for those who do not have a penchant for art and can hardly produce a work of art. Forcing them to take part in these classes merely results in an unnecessary pressure on learners. Furthermore, not every student will grow up to become a visual artist, or a musician so they have the right to choose which subject might provide direct benefit for them in the long run. For example, if a student have a passion for becoming a plumber, he should lay emphasis on job training rather than liberal art subjects since he can apply this sort of knowledge in their future career.
In conclusion, I do not believe that high school students should be required to attend art classes although they are as important as other core subjects for the development of children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 557, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...are encouraged to express their idea in an unique and genuine way. Although art ...
^^
Line 3, column 766, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...r than liberal art subjects since he can apply this sort of knowledge in their f...
^^
Line 3, column 799, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... he can apply this sort of knowledge in their future career. In conclusion, I d...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, however, if, so, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, sort of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 30.0 24.0651302605 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 33.0 41.998997996 79% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1509.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 314.0 315.596192385 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80573248408 5.12529762239 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.20951839842 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69100742366 2.80592935109 96% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573248407643 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 469.8 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.2975951904 128% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 45.1247499224 49.4020404114 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.75 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.1666666667 20.7667163134 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.91666666667 7.06120827912 112% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317196199092 0.244688304435 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.115731274697 0.084324248473 137% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.093908810107 0.0667982634062 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2244655114 0.151304729494 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0888830980631 0.056905535591 156% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 50.2224549098 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 12.4159519038 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.4 8.58950901804 98% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 9.78957915832 153% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.1190380762 123% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.