Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets, and groceries, … becoming more and more popular.
Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer ad included relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In a modern technology world where the Internet is blooming strongly, people tend to purchase items online rather than going directly to a shop, a store or an agent. Shopping online has its own advantages and disadvantages. To my point of view, the conveniences of this kind of shopping often outweigh any drawbacks.
First take a look at the dangers and disadvantages on purchasing things online. The Internet fraud appears to be the most dangerous problem which attracts publicity. Hackers may be able to make a copy of our credit card and steal our money unless the website which we provided our personal information is certainly secure. These days, some online shops offer better payment service which customers pay directly to the shipper at the delivery time. Another problem is that we can’t examine the item until we receive it. This mean we may sometimes buy what we don’t really want. Have a look at the example of my sister, she bought a blue handbag in the color of blue with a nametag on it. When she received it, however, it wasn’t the one she had ordered, a dark blue instead of a light blue and a bell instead of a nametag. She was really disappointed and said she would never buy anything from that shop again.
Despite the mentioned problems, buying things on the Internet, however, brings us significant benefits. First of all, online shopping helps us save a lot of time. In the early times, we waste so much time on going from shops to shops to buy things. With the develop of the Internet, the entire world (and all of the information in it) is at our fingertips. Wherever we are or whenever it is, we are still able to make a purchase with a simple click of a button. In addition, we are easily access to numerous shops with the same item we are looking for. Comparing prices, addition service or checking, reviewing other customers’ feedbacks are valuable conveniences which Internet purchasing provides us.
I already experienced the wonderful benefit of buying things via Internet. Despite how hard I try and how much time I spent on looking for a soap with my favorite flavor, I couldn’t find it in my country. Someday when surfing the Internet, I came across it at the Amazon.com. I purchased it right away and what impressed me most was that I received it within such a short time, approximately 2 weeks from abroad.
By the way of conclusion, I once again reaffirm my position that buying things on the Internet has a positive impact on modern life because of its benefits, I believe that it will bloom strongly so far.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 205, Rule ID: ON_GOING[1]
Message: Did you mean 'ongoing'?
Suggestion: ongoing
... the early times, we waste so much time on going from shops to shops to buy things. With...
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Line 3, column 219, Rule ID: PHRASE_REPETITION[1]
Message: This phrase is duplicated. You should probably leave only 'shops to'.
Suggestion: shops to
...es, we waste so much time on going from shops to shops to buy things. With the develop of the Int...
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Line 3, column 254, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...from shops to shops to buy things. With the develop of the Internet, the entire world and a...
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Line 3, column 304, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...p of the Internet, the entire world and all of the information in it is at our fingertips....
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Line 4, column 95, Rule ID: TRY_AND[1]
Message: "Try and" is common in colloquial speech, but "'try to'" is recommended for writing.
Suggestion: try to
...things via Internet. Despite how hard I try and how much time I spent on looking for a ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, look, may, really, so, still, in addition, kind of, by the way, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 24.0651302605 241% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 41.998997996 138% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2129.0 1615.20841683 132% => OK
No of words: 450.0 315.596192385 143% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.73111111111 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6057793516 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74423211054 2.80592935109 98% => OK
Unique words: 245.0 176.041082164 139% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544444444444 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 672.3 506.74238477 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 5.43587174349 258% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.384769539078 260% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 16.0721442886 149% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.0624238804 49.4020404114 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 88.7083333333 106.682146367 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.75 20.7667163134 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.20833333333 7.06120827912 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.136760754328 0.244688304435 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0443066850086 0.084324248473 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0343792394896 0.0667982634062 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0842198485725 0.151304729494 56% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0186699135746 0.056905535591 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 13.0946893788 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 50.2224549098 123% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 11.3001002004 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.4159519038 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.9 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 78.4519038076 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.