Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason
for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the
world.
What are your opinions on this?
Current children could play extremely the violent games .Because that the most issue of increase the number of violence and crime , it could be dramatically the violent games. This essay will illustrate this issue in term of environment of children and healthy before presenting my opinion.
On the one hand of this issue , violent games may have a negative side affect on the children in their eduction .This means ,the children try to practice the violence with each other and increase the crime in the schools because they imitation the games between them. In addition , if the parents do not refused their children , they will probably create unsafe environment for study .For example , psychological have a new study about the children they find most of the issues relate to the children who kills other and have due to violent games.As a result of this issue , violent games could threaten the child's environment .
On the other hand , playing violent games can effect children healthy . To clear this, the children could do not physical activity and that would affect their body and can make confusion in their brain and could miss the time of children because the violent games can take attention and force the children to play overmuch .For instance , when Saudi Arabia would except to buy the violent games to the children , the number of violence in the school increase sharply . Therefore , it is necessary to banned the violent games on order to save their healthy .
To summarize , it might not be possible to cover all the aspects of this issue . However, this essay focus only on environment of children and healthy .The most important points that have been mentioned are; using violent games will create imbalance place and can effect badly health of the children. Finally , it can be said that , the parents and teachers should guidance their children to avoid the violent games.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, may, therefore, for example, for instance, in addition, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 13.1623246493 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 7.85571142285 229% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 41.998997996 95% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1574.0 1615.20841683 97% => OK
No of words: 315.0 315.596192385 100% => OK
Chars per words: 4.99682539683 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.21286593061 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42183581445 2.80592935109 86% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 176.041082164 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.466666666667 0.561755894193 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 473.4 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.2975951904 153% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 112.687887548 49.4020404114 228% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 157.4 106.682146367 148% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.5 20.7667163134 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.8 7.06120827912 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 34.0 5.01903807615 677% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.67935871743 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356936837819 0.244688304435 146% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.170387007306 0.084324248473 202% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0621040353721 0.0667982634062 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.260676802123 0.151304729494 172% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0497377390675 0.056905535591 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 50.2224549098 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.31 12.4159519038 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.93 8.58950901804 92% => OK
difficult_words: 55.0 78.4519038076 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 9.78957915832 138% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.1190380762 142% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 56.1797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.