Today’s youngsters were glued into their seats watching their favorite programs shown on television in contrast to the children before. To some people, they think that it is advantageous to have prolong exposure with regards to viewership to these young minds. However, to others it is more disadvantageous.
On the one hand, televiewing have a huge positive impact to young televiewers in terms of mental process. Kids have a nature of being inquisitive. Watching educational shows such as Sesame Street, Nickelodeons, Discovery Channel, and National Geographic that promotes learning, catches the interest or attention of the kids resulting to enhance cognitive ability of the child such as perception, memory, judgment and reasoning. Another benefit of watching tv shows is it makes children stay at home making them safe. By children staying at home means parents feel at ease knowing their children are safe and not outside the streets playing. When children plays on the street like biking, skating or even just running around and chasing their playmates, they are prone to accidents such as tripping over and breaking their bones or they have been hit by an automobile.
On the other hand, there are also disadvantages of prolong viewership of minors on the black screen. Minors may have short attention span and leaving a young boy or girl in front of the tv without adult supervision may cause them to switch channels that is not conducive to their young mind. Seeing movies that promote violence such as action pictures pertaining to war or to combat an opponent may give a wrong impression for these preteens which could result to projecting inappropriate behaviors like bullying. Moreover, there are also unpleasant effects affecting health condition caused by excessive tuning in to broadcast programs. Eye constraint is one of the negative effect when the sense of sight is not rested. Too much concentrating by looking closely and focusing on the pictures shown in the lcd in long periods of time may cause blurred vision accompanied by headache. In addition, too much exposure by just sitting and staring in front of the tv the whole time is one example of sedentary lifestyle which makes young boys and young girls prone to being lazy and inactive resulting to decrease circulation of blood that makes them susceptible to sickness.
It is true that there are many positive concepts of television to young televiewers: to give entertainment, relaxation, and information. However, too much exposure of it may contribute to unhealthy and unpleasant result and therefore in my opinion, supervision from the parents or adults is highly recommended to prevent unnecessary results. In addition, parents or adults should also encourage their children to engage in activities where learning and fun co-exist as to balance everything.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...o others it is more disadvantageous. On the one hand, televiewing have a huge...
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...they have been hit by an automobile. On the other hand, there are also disadv...
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... makes them susceptible to sickness. It is true that there are many positive ...
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...on from the parents or adults is highly recommended to prevent unnecessary results. In addition, pare...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, moreover, so, therefore, as to, in addition, in contrast, such as, in contrast to, in my opinion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 10.4138276553 202% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 74.0 41.998997996 176% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.3376753507 156% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2401.0 1615.20841683 149% => OK
No of words: 457.0 315.596192385 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25382932166 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.62358717085 4.20363070211 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88481807946 2.80592935109 103% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 176.041082164 141% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.544857768053 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 735.3 506.74238477 145% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 16.0721442886 118% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4497915352 49.4020404114 139% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.368421053 106.682146367 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0526315789 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52631578947 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.163982294343 0.244688304435 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453325353694 0.084324248473 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0475770316674 0.0667982634062 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10969133593 0.151304729494 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073471561951 0.056905535591 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.3 13.0946893788 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 50.2224549098 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.47 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.39 8.58950901804 109% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 78.4519038076 168% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.