In countries where there is high unemployment, most pupils should be offered only primary education. There is no point in offering secondary education to those who will have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is recommended that education services should be limited at primary level in nations face high unemployment rate. I totally disagree with this policy due to its negative impacts on both the economy and the society.
To begin with, from an economic perspective, making secondary education unavailable to the majority of students can be seen as an unwise decision because of several reasons. Firstly, the tendency may create an imbalance in labor structure. Indeed, if most pupils were provided with primary education only, there would be a vast population having insufficient academic knowledge, allowing them to perform clerical works only. Consequently, the labor market would be dominated by blue-collar workers rather than white-collar employees, which leads to harsh recruitment for sweated labors and, therefore, unemployment may not be alleviated. Secondly, eliminating secondary level from compulsory education system, states are less likely to gain a competitive edge. Specifically, stepping into the 21st century, technological breakthroughs has been increasingly prevalent, production efficiency is being significantly upgraded by automation and the replacement of employees with machines, the advantages of which cannot be reaped by countries accomplishing those works manually.
From a social perspective, limited access to secondary education can be proved to be detrimental to the domestic tranquility. Firstly, not only does training programs offered by secondary schools focus on academic knowledge but also prepares youngsters for entering their adult life. Thus, as the shapers of a nation’s future, they are prone to face an austerity of soft skills, the drawbacks of which will be suffered by the whole country. Secondly, since education is considered to be a basic human right, any policy against its free access can be deemed as personal freedom infringement. Hence, if children are deterred from attending secondary schools, the authority may face a rage of criticism, leading to antisocial behaviors threatening social fabrics and raising a question mark over the order of law and constitution.
In brief, I strongly believe that people should oppose limitation of secondary education, since the bad influences it exerts are serious.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, in brief, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 7.85571142285 153% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 10.4138276553 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 24.0651302605 54% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 41.998997996 110% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.3376753507 228% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1939.0 1615.20841683 120% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.73668639053 5.12529762239 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14144486131 2.80592935109 112% => OK
Unique words: 222.0 176.041082164 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.656804733728 0.561755894193 117% => OK
syllable_count: 618.3 506.74238477 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.10420841683 238% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.2975951904 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.888714824 49.4020404114 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 138.5 106.682146367 130% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1428571429 20.7667163134 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.5 7.06120827912 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.189024755649 0.244688304435 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603330695736 0.084324248473 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0360073195825 0.0667982634062 54% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106632533052 0.151304729494 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0190811016638 0.056905535591 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 13.0946893788 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 30.2 50.2224549098 60% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 11.3001002004 133% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 16.31 12.4159519038 131% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.53 8.58950901804 123% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 78.4519038076 156% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.1190380762 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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