In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
It is true that in less developed countries, education for children in rural areas is troublesome because of the lack of educational provision. While a number of people believe that supplying them with computers and Internet connection could help to tackle this problem, I would argue that having more schools and teachers is much more reasonable
On the one hand, there are a variety of reasons why computers and Internet should be installed in these areas as a way to bridge the gap between urban and rural children. Firstly, this could be a source of information as nowadays distance learning is an increasingly popular trend in the world. Moon.vn, for instance, is a well-known educational website in Vietnam, as it offers learners with a large number of courses ranging from Mathematics, Biology to Literature, History. Secondly, by adopting this approach, children are given the opportunities to develop the IT skills, which obviously improve their prospective employment. Apart from the qualifications required for the job, computer skills help the employees stand out from the crowd so they have a better chance to chase the top jobs.
On the other hand, I believe that building more schools and employing more teachers result in more favourable outcomes. One reason for this view is that at young age, children don't have the ability to study on their own. They really need to go to school to learn basic skills such as numeracy and literacy, which cannot be learned through reading digitalized books or watching instructional videos. Another reason is that the more schools that there are in rural communities, the more pupils can attend and acquire new knowledge. With the patient guidance from teachers, they will know how to use online resources effectively. Therefore, the educational level in developing countries will increase.
In conclusion, although both views certainly have some validity, it seems to me that it is better to build more educational institutions and hire more teachers in rural communities.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, for instance, in conclusion, of course, such as, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 13.1623246493 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 24.0651302605 112% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 41.998997996 102% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 1615.20841683 106% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 5.21712538226 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86795049577 2.80592935109 102% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 176.041082164 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.593272171254 0.561755894193 106% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 506.74238477 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0019723596 49.4020404114 146% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.230769231 106.682146367 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1538461538 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.6153846154 7.06120827912 179% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248978739644 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0756481477968 0.084324248473 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0588569603456 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150592601664 0.151304729494 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0582406944808 0.056905535591 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 13.0946893788 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.03 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 9.78957915832 189% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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