In developing countries, children in rural communities have less access to education. Some people believe that the problem can be solved by providing more schools and teachers, while others think that the problem can be solved by providing computers and Internet access. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
In some developing nations, youngsters in remote areas must face a great deal of difficulties in access to education. While there are strong arguments that computers and Internet access supplement to children could help to clear up this prolem, I would argue that building schools and hiring more teachers is the top priority to this issue.
On the one hand, installing computers and equiping children with Internet access is beneficial to some extent. Firstly, distance learning is convenient for young people to approach the knowledge. For example, youngsters are able to enrol in a correspondence course and learning at home instead of traveling too far. Secondly, students can acquire skills which are useful for their future career. For instance, by using computers regularly, students could be expert in Microsot Office, which is useful if they intend to become white-collar workers.
On the other hand, I believe that studying under the supervision of teachers and schools is more advantageous in some ways. Firstly, face-to-face learning at school can motivate students and encourage interaction among students. For example, schools can offer extra-curricular activities such as games, clubs which gathers students in one organization and make them involved in school’s activities. Secondly, teachers carry out continuous assessment on students in order to tailor their teaching strategies. As a result, they can cure the problen of different levels of students’ ability in classes.
In conclusion, although both installing computers and Internet access and providing more schools and teachers are advantageous in their own ways, it seems to me that it is better to have more schools and teachers in rural areas.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion:
...n. While there are strong arguments that computers and Internet access supplement...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 267.0 315.596192385 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.51310861423 5.12529762239 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04229324003 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01341527712 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 156.0 176.041082164 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.584269662921 0.561755894193 104% => OK
syllable_count: 442.8 506.74238477 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.6987069496 49.4020404114 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.230769231 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5384615385 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0 7.06120827912 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204791019542 0.244688304435 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0675149260358 0.084324248473 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.043963867042 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12179086605 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252937645231 0.056905535591 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.8 13.0946893788 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 50.2224549098 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.68 12.4159519038 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.06 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 78.4519038076 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.7795591182 139% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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