'Failure id proof that the desire wasn't strong enough'
To what extent do you agree with this statement? give reasons for your answer.
There was a proverb that said that failure is proof that the desire wasn't strong enough. This quotation assumes that the quality of ambition controls the result. If a dreamer has a strong desire he may succeed, but the opposite result may occur if he does not dream enough. This suggestion has partly true, but I promote others two key factors which effect on failed result if those two cannot be fulfilled. Those are the ability and a condition.
It ways generally believed that people may have naturally desire first before taking an action. A hunger may not conduct an eating action if he does not have a desire to eat. However, a desire may just become an illusion, if a doer has no ability to act. For example, all of the music enthusiasts may have a big dream to play an instrument once they saw a pianist play the piano on youtube. They have great desire but few of them can play piano, even though, the rest of them learn hard but without proper skill, they will fail.
The second factor is an availability of a suitable condition. Writer positively believes that many talented children in the world still cannot catch on what they want for due to a poor condition, even though, they always have strong motivation. Palestinian children have such rich potential to become a good scientist, but controversial war deludes their desire, thousand of children have died violently before they got to the high school. That was the tragedy that all humans have to concern.
Above all, whatever strong or weak person's ambition, he possibly fails if he has no ability and chance. Therefore, those three factors, desire, ability, and condition, have to be managed carefully if we want to succeed, but if we do not, the looser attribute will come to us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: wasn't
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Suggestion: desired
...believed that people may have naturally desire first before taking an action. A hunger...
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...oer has no ability to act. For example, all of the music enthusiasts may have a big dream ...
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Suggestion: a thousand
...controversial war deludes their desire, thousand of children have died violently before ...
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Suggestion:
...ragedy that all humans have to concern. Above all, whatever strong or weak perso...
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Suggestion: persons'; person's
... Above all, whatever strong or weak persons ambition, he possibly fails if he has n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, may, second, so, still, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 13.1623246493 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 7.85571142285 140% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 10.4138276553 96% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 7.30460921844 123% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 24.0651302605 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 25.0 41.998997996 60% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1445.0 1615.20841683 89% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.70684039088 5.12529762239 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45744263142 2.80592935109 88% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5667752443 0.561755894193 101% => OK
syllable_count: 455.4 506.74238477 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 5.43587174349 184% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 2.52805611222 198% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.10420841683 190% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.76152304609 21% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.2975951904 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.2836546118 49.4020404114 92% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3125 106.682146367 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1875 20.7667163134 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.8125 7.06120827912 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.01903807615 120% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0889988435752 0.244688304435 36% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0335979011276 0.084324248473 40% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443489812644 0.0667982634062 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0557815586299 0.151304729494 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382152294424 0.056905535591 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 13.0946893788 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 50.2224549098 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 12.4159519038 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.58950901804 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 78.4519038076 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 9.78957915832 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.1190380762 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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