Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.
Write at least 250 words.
Today’s world has been divided into developing and industrialised countries which the main difference between them is the amount of money that governments apply in important sectors such as education, health and commerce. Most of the poorer nations are buried in debts as a result of their unbalanced finances which are reflect in a failed health care, an unstructured education system and a weak international trade. This vicious cycle will continue indefinitely unless wealthier nations show interest in minimizing the worldwide economic differences, as well as taking more responsibility for assisting less fortunate countries.
Most of the African countries live in sub-human conditions because of the extreme poverty, upheaval, hunger, disease, unemployment, lack of education and both inexperienced and corrupt administrations. The devastating consequences of the AIDS epidemic in those countries could improve if the infected population were to receive free drugs to control the disease, have access to health professionals and get information on how to prevent its spread. But this can only be achieved through international help programs in which leaders of the world’s richest countries donate medicine and also send doctors and nurses to treat and educate those in need.
Moreover, most of the poor countries rely on selling agricultural products and raw materials to rich nations and buying industrialized products from them resulting in a huge financial deficit. Consequently, they borrow a significant amount of money from the World Bank to try to improve their broken economies, but sometimes the money disappears with no significant changes and they cannot even pay the interest to the bank. Regarding this issue, last year the G8, which is comprised of leaders of the eight richest nations, decided to forgive billions of dollars worth of debt owed by the world’s poorest nations. In addition, they developed adequate loan programs to financially assist those countries.
In conclusion, leaders of the industrialised countries play an indispensable role in assisting developing nations in dealing with essential areas such as health, education and trade. Also, their aid is the key to breaking the vicious cycle, which results in poverty and death.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'reflected'.
Suggestion: reflected
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Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of' or 'is composed of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'if', 'moreover', 'regarding', 'so', 'well', 'in addition', 'in conclusion', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.270408163265 0.247107183377 109% => OK
Verbs: 0.135204081633 0.155533422707 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.119897959184 0.0946595960268 127% => OK
Adverbs: 0.030612244898 0.0501214627716 61% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0229591836735 0.0437548338989 52% => OK
Prepositions: 0.125 0.122226691241 102% => OK
Participles: 0.0484693877551 0.0403226058552 120% => OK
Conjunctions: 3.13265365513 2.80594681477 112% => OK
Infinitives: 0.030612244898 0.0326793684256 94% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.094387755102 0.0861772015684 110% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0102040816327 0.021408717616 48% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.015306122449 0.011925033212 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2286.0 1933.35771543 118% => OK
No of words: 347.0 316.048096192 110% => OK
Chars per words: 6.5878962536 6.12580529183 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.31600926901 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.440922190202 0.374742101984 118% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.368876080692 0.28420135186 130% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.256484149856 0.203846283523 126% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.193083573487 0.137316102897 141% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.13265365513 2.80594681477 112% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.037074148 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.605187319885 0.56093040696 108% => OK
Word variations: 71.0116067932 60.7387585426 117% => OK
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0891783567 75% => OK
Sentence length: 28.9166666667 20.7743622355 139% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.1218868704 49.517814964 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 190.5 127.492653851 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.9166666667 20.7743622355 139% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.08333333333 0.814263465372 133% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 3.99599198397 50% => OK
Readability: 65.8042747358 49.1944974215 134% => OK
Elegance: 2.35135135135 1.69124875643 139% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.455840416988 0.332605444948 137% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0867631420233 0.102741220458 84% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0375604498276 0.0668466124924 56% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.611833691074 0.534860350844 114% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.119125254732 0.148594505496 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.206079370297 0.134430193775 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0786084283578 0.0742795772207 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.397191813897 0.324371583561 122% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0766748092993 0.0638462369009 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.328088082569 0.228012699653 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0523605855976 0.058150111329 90% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.68436873747 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.41683366733 0% => More neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 6.0 5.90881763527 102% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 2.5751503006 155% => OK
Neutral topic words: 0.0 1.9629258517 0% => More neutral topic words wanted.
Total topic words: 10.0 10.4468937876 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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Note: This is not the final score. The e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.