It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
Until this modern era, educational system still continues to develop and it become debatable to find the proper way of children developing. Moral and character education such as giving an understand to the distinguish good or bad behaviour getting serious concern. It raised the question about whether punishment should be allowed to help them learn this differentiate and to encourage children more responsible. From my perspective, punishment is an effective way to remind kids and it will be safely as long as it is not physical punishment.
To begin with, punishment is an extra method to make remember. This can be attributed to the fact that children learn according to their experience. They eager to do something new which are watched in the tv programs or they saw adult activity in their daily life. If they do not get feedback about their action, they will think that it is a fine to do that. However, parents and teachers must forgiven first and give a warn to them before sanction is imposed. A child draws in wall, for example, can not watch his favourite tv channel if he did in a second time. Hence, it keeps in their mind that he can draw only in the right place.
Besides, punishment must be limited and it is not corporal. Children are active learners; nevertheless, they can highly sensitive when they get bad experience. Exaggerate punishment not only harm them but also it will make them a passive person as though they are in underpressure. What is more, wrong education can impact their social activity. Hatered to society, for instance, might encourage to misdemeanour in their community. In contrast, if parents and teachers give more educated punishment, they will be care to their neighbourhood. As an evidence, a child is demanded to help their parents such as clean a house or he must do goodness to someone when they make wrong deeds. Thereby, it might gain their good personality.
In a word, punishment should be allowed in order that children more aware about their action; nonetheless, punishment must consider prudently and do not hurt children.
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Essay evaluation report
it become debatable
it becomes debatable
Moral and character education such as giving an understand to the distinguish good or bad behaviour getting serious concern.
Description: what is the verb for this sentence? can you re-write this sentence?
as it is not physical punishment.
as it is not a physical punishment.
They eager to do something
They are eager to do something
parents and teachers must forgiven first
parents and teachers must forgive first
Exaggerate punishment not only harm them but also it will make them a passive person
Exaggerate punishments not only harm them but also will make them a passive person //parallel
they will be care to their neighbourhood.
they will be caring to their neighbourhood.
they will care to their neighbourhood.
children more aware about their action;
children are more aware about their actions;
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
Don't forget 'be' verbs.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1686 1500
No. of Different Words: 188 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.79 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.684 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 41 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.678 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.284 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.44 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.092 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 77, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'becomes'?
Suggestion: becomes
...ystem still continues to develop and it become debatable to find the proper way of chi...
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Line 1, column 186, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... and character education such as giving an understand to the distinguish good or bad behaviou...
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Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...ucation such as giving an understand to the distinguish good or bad behaviour getting serious c...
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Line 3, column 119, Rule ID: AFFORD_VBG[1]
Message: This verb is used with infinitive: 'to accord'.
Suggestion: to accord
...ributed to the fact that children learn according to their experience. They eager to do s...
^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 395, Rule ID: PRP_PAST_PART[2]
Message: Did you mean 'have forgiven' or 'forgive'?
Suggestion: have forgiven; forgive
...hat. However, parents and teachers must forgiven first and give a warn to them before sa...
^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 419, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...d teachers must forgiven first and give a warn to them before sanction is imposed. A c...
^^^^^^
Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'besides', 'but', 'first', 'hence', 'however', 'if', 'nevertheless', 'nonetheless', 'second', 'so', 'still', 'for example', 'for instance', 'in contrast', 'such as', 'to begin with', 'what is more']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.198473282443 0.247107183377 80% => OK
Verbs: 0.180661577608 0.155533422707 116% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0865139949109 0.0946595960268 91% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0559796437659 0.0501214627716 112% => OK
Pronouns: 0.0941475826972 0.0437548338989 215% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.089058524173 0.122226691241 73% => OK
Participles: 0.030534351145 0.0403226058552 76% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.82234702963 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0458015267176 0.0326793684256 140% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.00163938923432 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0559796437659 0.0861772015684 65% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0432569974555 0.021408717616 202% => Less modal verbs wanted (like 'must , shall , will , should , would , can , could , may , and might').
WH_determiners: 0.0127226463104 0.011925033212 107% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2089.0 1933.35771543 108% => OK
No of words: 352.0 316.048096192 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.93465909091 6.12580529183 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33147354134 4.20517956788 103% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.321022727273 0.374742101984 86% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.258522727273 0.28420135186 91% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.210227272727 0.203846283523 103% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.139204545455 0.137316102897 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82234702963 2.80594681477 101% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 176.037074148 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.528409090909 0.56093040696 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 56.7816720739 60.7387585426 93% => OK
How many sentences: 20.0 16.0891783567 124% => OK
Sentence length: 17.6 20.7743622355 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3766505371 49.517814964 65% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.45 127.492653851 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.6 20.7743622355 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.9 0.814263465372 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38877755511 91% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 3.99599198397 150% => OK
Readability: 43.4522727273 49.1944974215 88% => OK
Elegance: 0.961538461538 1.69124875643 57% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.406327618107 0.332605444948 122% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.0816828394506 0.102741220458 80% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0642233989713 0.0668466124924 96% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.455570287773 0.534860350844 85% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.163940176725 0.148594505496 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.147472857686 0.134430193775 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0896433823552 0.0742795772207 121% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.338449964471 0.324371583561 104% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.112887958264 0.0638462369009 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.271610525552 0.228012699653 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988381073729 0.058150111329 170% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.68436873747 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.41683366733 117% => OK
Positive topic words: 7.0 5.90881763527 118% => OK
Negative topic words: 7.0 2.5751503006 272% => OK
Neutral topic words: 2.0 1.9629258517 102% => OK
Total topic words: 16.0 10.4468937876 153% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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