It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for music and sport, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become good sports person or musician.
Discuss the two ideas giving your opinion.
It is discussed that the necessary of natural advantage for some famous musicians and athletes. While talents indeed take a major proportion of being successful, I take the view of the importance of diligence.
There is plenty of musicians and athletes who are called genius in the ancient and modern times. It is not only many of them have shown their abilities in their young ages but also they are inherent sensitivity on the music and sport. For instance, athletes who have better physical coordination will take less time to practice basic works, and musicians who have extreme memory and note-distinguishing can easily learn the arcane musical works. Mozart was well known for the legend of his talent in music in his early age at three and performing around Europe when he was only six-year-old. Michael Jordan, the outstanding basketball player in the century, also celebrated for his jumping ability and create the famous “fade away”.
Practice makes perfect is, however, unvarying. It can be the fortune for those who are born with talents, but it will not be an excuse to stop others from learning and improving their skills. Lang lang who is an eminent pianist has been nominated as the man can change the world by Teenpeople magazine. He spends most of his life on playing the piano, and attribute his success to his sedulous practice. On the other hand, the illustrious "linsanity", Jeremy Lin was not good at playing basketball in the beginning, but he never gave up his dream and kept practicing. Finally, he went through a hard time and became the shining star.
In conclusion, talents may be the sufficient condition of success, but only practice is the necessary condition of being successful.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: Lang
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, may, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 13.1623246493 137% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 10.4138276553 154% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1458.0 1615.20841683 90% => OK
No of words: 288.0 315.596192385 91% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 5.12529762239 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.11953428781 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9332777641 2.80592935109 105% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.604166666667 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 452.7 506.74238477 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.76152304609 42% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0586936778 49.4020404114 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.142857143 106.682146367 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5714285714 20.7667163134 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.21428571429 7.06120827912 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209060564052 0.244688304435 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0643969695474 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0560404577701 0.0667982634062 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.109829816758 0.151304729494 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0415324921728 0.056905535591 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.7 13.0946893788 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 50.2224549098 102% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.3001002004 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.58950901804 105% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 78.4519038076 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 9.78957915832 112% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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