It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsman and musician. Discuss both thes

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It's generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport and music, and others are not. However, it's sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sportsman and musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that children spectacular sportsmen or musicians are all born with talents. But there is also a different flow of idea that with hard working and being taught the right way, any kid can become a great athlete or artist. In this essay, I will discuss both opinions and give out mine.
In the first statement, it says that many agree with the idea that talents are attached to some child since they were born. It's can be clearly seen on the news and internet that many kids are only 5 years old have become a music instrument prodigies or natural athletes. According to science, genetic playing a huge role in defining the talent of the kid, example their reflection or creativity. So that the father and the mother that have an appropriate type of gene will give the kid born out with a certain level of advantage on music or sport. Sometimes, according to the believer, it's the God that decided the gifted child and explain why some children are extraordinary although their parent doesn't have a good gene.
Opposite with upper ideal, a vast majority of people is now accepted with the opinion that kids can become a sportsman or musician with properly way of teaching. The first thing the children need to be taught is always concentrated on the way they choose. It means that hard working and dedicating are strongly important to create talents. Example, many football players like Luka Modric or CR7 become a top star with their hard working spirit and passion. Virtuoso has to spend 8-10 hours a day just to practice since they were a kid. In this situation, talents are born by regular practice and dedication.
In conclusion, both believers of the two statements have their own right. But in my opinion, I weighted more on the idea that any kid can be good at sport or music if they were taught in the right way.

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Average: 6.1 (1 vote)

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, as to, in conclusion, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 13.1623246493 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 24.0651302605 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 41.998997996 98% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.3376753507 72% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1519.0 1615.20841683 94% => OK
No of words: 327.0 315.596192385 104% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64525993884 5.12529762239 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25242769721 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42908569482 2.80592935109 87% => OK
Unique words: 179.0 176.041082164 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547400611621 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.60771543086 87% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.2975951904 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.176929353 49.4020404114 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.9375 106.682146367 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4375 20.7667163134 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.8125 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.67935871743 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.256375416786 0.244688304435 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0822855384787 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0610131638995 0.0667982634062 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.173156792138 0.151304729494 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0457506925918 0.056905535591 80% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.0946893788 82% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 50.2224549098 136% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.3001002004 77% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.4159519038 78% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.62 8.58950901804 89% => OK
difficult_words: 62.0 78.4519038076 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.1190380762 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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