In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for laerning and taking responsibility. What is your opinion on this?

There is a contentious debate regarding the issue of the children work. Some people firmly believe children work is definitely not valuable in the long term. On the flip, other persistently consider children work is valuable in terms of work experience, learning and taking responsibilities. To me, the idea of the former party seems more appealing.

Education is one of the most valuable part of someone's life. It changes the future in various aspects. So clearly, it's advised to study as much as possible in the early stage of life. When children get involved in work their study will be certainly frustrated in some way and consequently, their academic result will be declined. This fact had been found by multiple surveys in various institutions.

According to the later party, the stuff children learn in the early stage of life play an important role in the whole life. Started working early in life with a matured environment they will gather experience and personalities that will build them for their future job life. One controversy exists here is that very few workplaces are safe for children as most of them are hazardous for them somehow. Besides, starting work-life early has some mental effects too. One statistic shows that those who started working from a little age, among them almost 50 percent are addicted to the drug in their middle age.

In conclusion, challenging children choose work-life very early to support their family financially and it seems there are few advantages of it, in the long run, it will affect the nation's education system. Its disadvantages extremely outweigh its advantages. So the government and the family should protect children so that they don't have to get involved in work anyway. Also, it's the government's responsibility to take the necessary steps to prevent children engagement in work.

Votes
Average: 6.7 (1 vote)

Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'nations'' or 'nation's'?
Suggestion: nations'; nation's
...it, in the long run, it will affect the nations education system. Its disadvantages ext...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ly should protect children so that they dont have to get involved in work anyway. Al...
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Line 7, column 379, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...e to get involved in work anyway. Also, its the governments responsibility to take ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, anyway, besides, consequently, if, regarding, so, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 24.0651302605 108% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1549.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 303.0 315.596192385 96% => OK
Chars per words: 5.11221122112 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.20363070211 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79816219759 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 171.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564356435644 0.561755894193 100% => OK
syllable_count: 483.3 506.74238477 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 16.0721442886 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.2975951904 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.9490079507 49.4020404114 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.0555555556 106.682146367 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8333333333 20.7667163134 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 7.06120827912 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.67935871743 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.249683982885 0.244688304435 102% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825816571417 0.084324248473 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0807026612548 0.0667982634062 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.16218312388 0.151304729494 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0924695708701 0.056905535591 162% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 13.0946893788 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 50.2224549098 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 11.3001002004 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 12.4159519038 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.23 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 78.4519038076 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 9.78957915832 56% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.1190380762 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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