In many countries, government are spending a large amount of money on improving internet access. Why it is happening and do you tthink it is the most appropriate use of government money?
It is true that a massive part of national budget has been used to afford the internet access in many nations. There are several reasons for this happening, and in my perspective, this is not the suitable way to use state money.
The government has acknowledged how the Internet benefits the lives of citizens and then take steps to reduce the limitations of network connections between different areas. Firstly, due to the technological advances, people in many parts have a high demand of utilizing online services for various purposes, from entertainment to keep in touch with friends and relatives. Also, since the world recently has became a global village, with the availability of Internet, people could easily update breaking-news all over the world with a click on smartphone or tablet. Consequently, it will help enhance the knowledge among residents and people are now face beyond lagging behind.
On the other hand, I believe spending a huge proportion of financial budget in the Internet could be deemed unproductive. It can be seen that in the developing countries, particularly in Viet Nam, low-income inhabitants are confronted with much high pressure due to their poor living standard, while the state is trying to improve the Internet connections. This results in another burden on the national economy. Apart from that, the authority should take a heed of recontructing infracstructure in remote area, increasing the social wealth-fare, proving long-term insurance for underprivilige residents in order to enrich the image of the country.
In conclusion, while i believe that the government uses a vast money to develop the Internet access for many reasons, I firmly argue that they should pay attention to enhance the living standard by issuing social policies.
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Suggestion: become
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'vast money'.
Suggestion: vast money
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, consequently, first, firstly, if, so, then, while, apart from, in conclusion, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 10.4138276553 48% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 7.30460921844 68% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 41.998997996 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.3376753507 96% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 1615.20841683 93% => OK
No of words: 284.0 315.596192385 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.30633802817 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.20363070211 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0124119191 2.80592935109 107% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 176.041082164 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.619718309859 0.561755894193 110% => OK
syllable_count: 472.5 506.74238477 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 5.43587174349 129% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 57.8966020499 49.4020404114 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.0 106.682146367 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.8181818182 20.7667163134 124% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.2727272727 7.06120827912 145% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.9879759519 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.18183973939 0.244688304435 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.061360943503 0.084324248473 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0612633518664 0.0667982634062 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120714160333 0.151304729494 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0618945566758 0.056905535591 109% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 13.0946893788 126% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.4159519038 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.88 8.58950901804 115% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 9.78957915832 143% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.7795591182 130% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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