In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have more positive or negative effects on the society?
In the threshold of the new era, an uplift the number of people are concerned about elderly-related problems. While many people have varying view with regard to whether it is a positive trend to climb steadily the percentage of aging population in a variety of countries, my view is that it has a negative influence on societies.
It is irrefutable that the aging of population has indeed several disadvantages. Firstly, the more people retiring, the fewer workforce is, resulting in imbalance in terms of economy. Governments have to rely indeliberately on immigration from other areas to improve the level of inequality while this is less-than-desirable solution. Aside from that, the trend of aging population establish a grand challenge for governments regarding social welfare, including retirement funds and health care services for oldster, especially ones who live in rural areas. Take Viet Nam as a particular example, which has the fastest pace of aging in Asia, the senior citizens living in rural, mountainous areas, and who are ethnic minority people only access to poor quality services. Accordingly, it is inevitable for government bodies to pay more attention as well as to pay a huge money for elderly’s social security policies in order to keep up with this trend.
Nevertheless, that is not to say that an increasing of older people is unbeneficial. The elderly, particulary, are able to make contributons to whole society via participate volunteer organizations, support their family by supervising the household and taking care of children. Provied that administrations make an effort to guarantee and to improve income for the aged through their employment and retirement, there would be likely to more opportunities to perform their capability in various fields. However, only few someones of them can do that such as older scientists and professionals obviously.
In conclusion, for the reasons I have mentioned above, I suppose that aging of population have serious impact on economies and societies. In addition, gorvernment should give appropriate policies to enhance this status at present as well as in the long run. By doing so, the society operate effectively and efficiently.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, firstly, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, so, well, while, as to, i suppose, in addition, in conclusion, such as, as well as, with regard to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 7.30460921844 151% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 24.0651302605 91% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 41.998997996 133% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 349.0 315.596192385 111% => OK
Chars per words: 5.3553008596 5.12529762239 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.20363070211 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.24697087229 2.80592935109 116% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 176.041082164 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.601719197708 0.561755894193 107% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 506.74238477 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.60771543086 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 7.0 2.52805611222 277% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.961732957 49.4020404114 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.6 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.2666666667 20.7667163134 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 11.3333333333 7.06120827912 161% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.9879759519 125% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.232630151853 0.244688304435 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0658187976134 0.084324248473 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596232096283 0.0667982634062 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.131604989151 0.151304729494 87% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564363450825 0.056905535591 99% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.5 13.0946893788 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 31.21 50.2224549098 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 11.3001002004 129% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.1 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.03 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 78.4519038076 148% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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