Although it is sometimes thought passing related course in university to job wanted, guarantee finding appropriate occupation, other people believe that focusing on getting experience after school cultivates better and more expert employee. In my opinion, deciding whether to focus on more education or finding job should depend on kind of career wanted.
On the one hand, those people who consider that education in university is mandatory part of stable career, claim that university certification have always been reliable for any employers who want to take on experts. In other words, graduates or postgraduates are known as a professional and genius persons who can easily deal with unexpected obstacles, which might be faced, during work. furthermore, during the course, student not only are taught in related field but also are learned how to behavior in society an families which cause the culture of society are developed.
On the other hand, other people who are agree gaining experience in work environment is more convenience believe that as children enter job market in early ages, they learn essential vocations sooner, consequently they will be independence earlier than those study in university so they can afford their life and feel happily more. For example when seller is desirable job for some one working in bazaar and get familiar with producer play the main role for getting successful and going university and studying business is really waste of time.
I personally think while some career such as medicine or engineering which cannot be learnt by ourselves, studying in university is mandatory, as there should be done scientific labor and is needed experts person, some occupations are needed experience employee such as gardener, farmer and so on. As a result, it is truly important that highschool student clear their target for themselves and continue their way in right routs.
In conclusion, despite people having different views, I believe due to the sort of desirable career for any one, have been decided which way should be picked out.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...school cultivates better and more expert employee. In my opinion, deciding whethe...
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Suggestion: Furthermore
...les, which might be faced, during work. furthermore, during the course, student not only ar...
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Suggestion: a
... are learned how to behavior in society an families which cause the culture of soc...
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Suggestion: an family; families
... are learned how to behavior in society an families which cause the culture of society are ...
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Message: A noun should not follow "who". Try changing to a verb or maybe to 'who is a are'.
Suggestion: who is a are
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Suggestion: agreed
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Suggestion:
...ying business is really waste of time. I personally think while some career suc...
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Suggestion: anyone
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, really, so, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of, sort of, such as, as a result, in my opinion, in other words, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 13.1623246493 160% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 7.85571142285 102% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 10.4138276553 125% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 7.30460921844 192% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1753.0 1615.20841683 109% => OK
No of words: 332.0 315.596192385 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28012048193 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.2685907696 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72159014373 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 176.041082164 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.60843373494 0.561755894193 108% => OK
syllable_count: 556.2 506.74238477 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Interrogative: 0.0 0.384769539078 0% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.76152304609 168% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 10.0 16.0721442886 62% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.2975951904 163% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.6521134466 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 175.3 106.682146367 164% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.2 20.7667163134 160% => OK
Discourse Markers: 17.7 7.06120827912 251% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.38176352705 114% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.01903807615 159% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219237225825 0.244688304435 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.079163927885 0.084324248473 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0644338651598 0.0667982634062 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108036089821 0.151304729494 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0640129145327 0.056905535591 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.0 13.0946893788 153% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 50.2224549098 59% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.44779559118 150% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 11.3001002004 153% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 12.4159519038 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.27 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 78.4519038076 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 9.78957915832 158% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.1190380762 150% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.7795591182 148% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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