Many people think that life success depends on hard work and determination. Other argues that factors like appearance and money are more important. What is your opinion and why?
Public opinion is divided on elements leading to people’s achievement. While I agree that wealth and physical appearance are essential, I also believe that diligence and persistence are more significant.
On the one hand, there is no doubt that money and personal appearance play a pivotal role in attaining accomplishments. Firstly, those who were born in affluent families typically have good foundations for their development and prosperity. For instance, they could easily have a better education or start their own business without having to borrow money from the bank, which allows them to get a secure job in the future. Secondly, nowadays, it often appears that attractive appearance is of great importance in certain careers such as entertainment or fashion. Indeed, if a singer or a model is good-looking, it is possible for him or her to draw attention from the audiences and have greater opportunities to climb the social ladder.
On the other hand, I am of opinion that determined and industrious people are likely to have better chances of success. Perhaps the principal reason is that not everyone is fortunate enough to be born in wealthy families or to be beautiful, but by putting a great deal of effort, they could achieve their goals. The other reason is that major success seldom comes easily without perseverance. One of the notable examples is Thomas Edison, a well-known inventor, who conducted countless experiments and also failed thousands of times before eventually inventing the working light bulb
In conclusion, although I acknowledge that money and personal appearance significantly contribute to people’s success, I would argue that the role of being hard working and persistent is far more crucial.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, well, while, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 7.85571142285 38% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 10.4138276553 144% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 41.998997996 74% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.3376753507 168% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1465.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 277.0 315.596192385 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.28880866426 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.07962216107 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0265284342 2.80592935109 108% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 176.041082164 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.613718411552 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 461.7 506.74238477 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 5.43587174349 147% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.10420841683 143% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5050734454 49.4020404114 171% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.181818182 106.682146367 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1818181818 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.4545454545 7.06120827912 176% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.01903807615 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2174593988 0.244688304435 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0765324841267 0.084324248473 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0723760335456 0.0667982634062 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139372055123 0.151304729494 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0657182394242 0.056905535591 115% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.1 13.0946893788 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 50.2224549098 75% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 12.4159519038 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.78 8.58950901804 114% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 78.4519038076 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 9.78957915832 117% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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